I haven't posted a poem in a long time, but I wanted to put this one up, as it's different than what I usually write. So, um . . . enjoy?

Soldier
By Nearphotison

I've crossed the line
Without any shame.
I break the rules
Everytime I play.
I'm stepping up,
I'm taking a chance.
I'm buckling down,
I'm ready for war,
I'm ready to die.
I'm a soldier
Neither man nor beast
And I try to
Compete to survive.

Hollow inside
Thrumming to the drums.
The orders rise,
Telling me to fight,
Fight to survive.
I can't be chained down,
Society
Is too weak for me,
Too weak for my needs.
Calls me a threat
But I'm not done yet.
Old school soldier
Whose waiting for you.

I see the line,
Drawn deep in the sand.
Trying to find
Out just who I am.
Not man or beast
Just an old soldier
No now or then
Just the present time
Here for the present.
I'll live each die
Fighting to survive.
The world will see
Just what I can be.

This is a good poem but it is too long, Near. too long good thing I did not have my 2 paragraph fiter on or I would never be able to read this man.

That's long? Have you ever read a real poem? This one is actually about 1/3 the length it was originally intended to be, man.

But I'm glad you liked it. I'm also glad you actually read it, seeing as how nobody else has . . .

(slash nazi)

I enjoyed it, but I do . . . agree with Dik-Dik . . . that the length is a bit excessive. The idea would've been just as clear in two stanzas. Overall, I did like it, however. Nice to see non-Sephyr poetry on the gate from time to time.

n.n I liked it a lot. I didn't think it was too long, either. Shorter than some of sephyr's poems. o.o Anywho, it's really good. Great work, Near. =D

Yay! After waiting a week, people actually read it!
I'm glad the length was the only complaint with this one, I might post a shorter poem in the future

Don't make it shorter unless your point only requires little development, as this one did.

I just keep writing until I reach a good stopping point. But what I meant was that I have an idea for a poem that wouldn't be more than one or two stanzas long.