So I feel incredibly bad that I haven't posted one of my poems in a while. I don't know what's been going on with me...I think it's because I've been hard at work on writing lyrics for my band. (So far I've got almost 3 albums written and editted.)

I sincerely apologize with this ^_^. Enjoy and tell me what you think.


Exhaust
By Sephyr

Containable; undeniable.
Breathe into me what I'm sorely missing,
Scourge my soul and wreak havoc when able.

Painful; excruciating.
Break everything down and rebuild,
Suffer this morbid grinding and grating.

Original; caliginous.
The sewer in which I reside calls to you,
The seepage of emotions so ambiguous.

Anxious; craving.
Arctic ability to halt the process,
Freeze over the hot ranting and raving.

Incest; rapist.
Imperfection is what I dwell on,
Assist me in disposing of this.

Exhaust; smoke.
What comes in must go out,
Watch as the fire crackles and smotes.

Interest; delaying.
Look into the eyes of a murderer,
Know the person you'll be saving.

Discarded; trash.
You've tried so hard to gather it together,
But you're decisions were too hasty and rash.

Blood; gore.
You're petty "R" ratings couldn't top this,
I've got pictures imprinted in my head evermore.

Normal; sane.
You lived your life fighting for others,
To only realize it's a fight in vain.

Black; wrong.
I'm sick of waiting for something to happen,
But I'm just too far gone.

I like it very much. I would rather see great poems like these on ocassion than good ones every day.

What PD said. ^^; Good poem! I liked it a lot!

hmm...interesting. I'm not much of a poet so I can't really claim to be much of a poetic critic. Now what I'm not sure if this is expression of actual pains that has happened or if it's just "Pseudo-Angst" for the netertainment of the audience. Either way, it's pretty good. Sounds almost like a song, really. You write songs, too, don't you? alot of people I know who write poetry also write songs. I suppose the two go hand in hand. Overall, the meaning behind it is quite interesting and the farct that you didn't actually focus on making the lines rhyme, they did so anyway on the most part. I don't usually read poetry because it doesn'ty really interest me, but this kinda makes me wanna go bck and read more of your stuff...

Anyway, never let your imgination die. If that happens then you may as well write an infomerical XD

I can assure you that this is not the case.

that's good, but it's also kinda pitiable to know that the alternative is true. Then again it's not my place to judge. XP

I deal with alost of fake angst at school. It's as geek school so everyone tries to be cool and angst ridden but ultimately it will never be XD

I know what you mean.

Why, I'm pleased that this topic has gotten so many comments ^_^

@ Saber: Thanks for the long-ass criticism ;) It's much appreciated (it makes me feel like people actually are interested on a deeper level)
Pseudo-angst...hehe XD There is a difference between angst and real shit. Just like there's a difference between emo and emotional, if you know what I mean.

I write what is me.

Thanks for the comments everyone ^_^