We walk side by side,
Hard boots storming down at the same time,
I look down as you look up,
I don’t see as you do, but you miss the beggars that I see.

They hold out their hands to me,
Wanting what they would think I have to offer,
I turn my head, but only to see another face wanting.

I reach for something they want,
That I figure they would need to go on peaceful,
But what I have is lint,
So I give them a hug, all warm and comforting.

Angel's wings hidden behind my back,
Torn apart over the years from not being used,
My own Personal Jesus now giving me the strength to spread them, to carry me away.

My strength is the support I have to carry,
I'm as strong as a thousand armies,
But as soft as the pillow you rest on in the heart of the day.

Don’t take me for granted,
My softness, my comfort,
I will take it away no matter your impact in my quest.

I will give all I can to those who fully effect my life,
A constant stream of emotion and wanting,
I will treat you as my child, coddled to the fullest extent.

I can only cry out for help,
but unless you look down with me,
you wont see what I am crying out for,
You will help me, grab my shoulder, keep me steady,
But you wont understand.

You come to my wall, dark and tall,
you want to get over, so you start climbing,
I don’t let it down, I don’t let you in,
Letting that big of something come crashing down would let love in,
Something I can not afford to let into my life.

Welcome to the boards, lady_jayne_lee! As you can tell, we're in a transitional phase. I hope that you will decide to join us at the new forum next month!

Very nice poem. Although it may lack originality, it is very personal, and I like that. If you repost this on the new boards, I may be able to offer a more sufficient response.

Thank you for choosing our community to share your work!

Thank you for the very nice welcome. Although I am unsure how an original poem can be called unoriginal, I am thankful I recieved a comment and feed-back for what I do. I look forward to the new forum and would love to repost it to maybe get even more feed back. Thank you once again

You are quite welcome. We are glad to have you.

Sorry if I offended you. By "originality," I really meant "innovation." Although it is clearly your own work, it does not, on its own, stand out amidst other poems like it.

This isn't how I wanted to come across on my first post, not even to mention my first day in this forum. I would be interested to know the type my poem is, what it is being compared to, "admist other poems" like it.

Again, I meant no offense. Your poem is well-written and personally meaningful, and I intend to read over it more carefully later. I have no specific criticism as far as what should be changed or improved.

If you want a specific, in-depth response, I cannot offer one at this time. I'm sure that if you repost this on the new boards next month, you will find plenty of helpful comments. In the interim, try submitting it to deviantART (if you haven't already!)

Sorry that I cannot be more helpful, but I like to read poems over very carefully before making judgments beyond the first impression, and I don't currently have the time. Thanks again!