Well, this is what I've been working on for a while. What do you guys think?
My freind like it, but personally I'd like a opinion from the people that will be reading the proto-type of it. : P

I read it yesterday, its pretty good, I cant wait for the next part ^_^
But the spoilers o.O well, you wrote a warning...

MAJOR ANNOUCMENT:
Chapters 2 , 3 , and part of 4 will be up to veiw soon within the week.
Although initial comments are less than what I had expected, I think when we get to the demon, everyone will want to read... Hopefully : P

I cant wait ^_^ ... but I dont know about the others <_<

Major update. The second, third, and fourth chapters had been posted. Friday, everyone will see a black-and-white rendition of Leigon, courtesy of my freind, Ashlyn.

Any POSITIVE critisism, or POSITIVE comments? : P

Comments? Here are some:

Interesting idea to put demons in. Also interesting to have Ixen absorb Legion.

At first it was hard to remember who was who, but once I read enough, I could recognize them by the way they acted. Very nice characterization.

My only complaint is the capitalization, which you really shouldn't worry about: it's just a pet peeve of mine. It's good so far! Keep it up.

Why, thank you! : P

As for the demons, the naruto timeline and culture lineage is about as tight as a sieve. I had tons of room for development, new jutsu's and seals, and also to include in demons and sub-cultures, as naruto had demons in it, so by par, I can do whatever the hell I want with it without much plot line interference.

Also, I draw elements from Angel, such as the quirky arguement's between Ixen and Keiro, and the fact that Legion was a spectacular Smart-ass, and back stabs whenever possible... interesting fact, Legion was not my origonal Idea. In fact, it was a shared idea between me and my co-author/creative director, William Rounseville. He also had the Idea for ixen, origonally Kain, and for Lily's disposition. Also in fact, each of the characters are based upon someone I know in real life. This is how I was able to characterize them as they were. At first, it's like meeting someone, new, and once you get to know them, you can almost predict what they're going to do.

And again, thanks for the comment! I'll try to fix the captitalization, but that's a little tough. Microsoft word isn't the best of writing programs.

Been a while, but starting in 10 days, the fith, sixth, seventh, and final chapter of MURASAMA Shall be placed.
This will lead to the second book of my fan series, yet to be named. If anyone has any suggestions, I would be glad to concider them.

This shouldn't take long,as I've finished the fifth chapter already.

Fifth and sixth up.
Yay.
Sleep now.