Okay so yeah
I'm totally new to this
so give me a break if my first fic isnt....well alittle perfect as one might say. :excited:

well I wanna ask your guys opinion on my first fic summary...wheather i should continue

ok well here it goes..

It a kind of love story that starts out with Inuyasha and Kagome of course, but then someone comes in and accidently steals Inuyasha's heart from Kagome. {{and no its not Kikyo, for all you Kikyo fans out there.}} But the thing is...she doesnt mean to even tho she thought he was very cute! ^^ and to her surprise, she turns out to be just like Inuyasha.

Should I keep writing? or no?

okay so does everyone hate it? :bigeyescry:

no one is replying to my summary

should i just write it anyway and see if ppl reply?

oh in one of the chapters...there might some lemon....but i havent decided yet :faint:

Your first mistake was no posting chapter one or posting a prolouge.

Do that first and maybe people will read.

oh okay!

my bad :chidorisd:

told u i was new to this

but thanks for advice!

okay guys here it comes...the prologue

Prologue

Hello, my name is Kiara Tatzana. I’m just your average 15-year-old freshman...and wow, what torture. My best friend ever lives right across the street from me, at the Higurashi Shrine. Her name is Kagome Higurashi; we’ve known each other since kindergarten.

It was up until her 15th birthday that we were inseparable. That’s the day I barely ever saw her anymore. She got very sick so suddenly with these awful unusual illnesses. She occasionally came to school, and when she did, she was way behind on everything! I felt really bad for her. I always tried to help her, but the days that I offered to help her...she was sick again. Poor Kagome.

Our other friends Yuri, Kazynna {{made that up hehe}}, Mae and I always cheered Kagome up when she needed it. Like every time her snotty, rude boyfriend broke up with her, or so the girls say he is. She can never seem to get over him. That’s why things really get ugly when I find out why Kagome’s really been gone from school.

So what do u guys think of the prologue
Sucks don’t it? :chidorisd: :chidorisd: :chidorisd:

Hello! :kittylove: Your wrong, TOTALLY WRONG if you think this prolouge sucks cuz it TOTALLY doesn't suck! I think thats a cool idea and I hope you write the 1st chapter. I'm totally new to this whole thing too and I posted a summary thing 4 my fanfic and nobody replied to my summary thingy-ma-bober either. :cryriver: Keep writing!!!! Oh, and don't forget, it doesn't, repeat DOESN'T suck. :dancow: Gotta love that funky cow. LOL :daydream:

Thanks a bunch DemonChild=)D!!
it's nice to hear i've got a fan!
WOOO!! lol :excited:
spazic moment! hehe :chidorisd:
well thanks again and im working on the 1st chappie rite now!

OKIE-DOKIE! :moji: I can't wait for the 1st chappie! I bet it's gonna be AWSUM! :kicking: Be sure to control those spazic moments though..... You're gonna freak people out.... I'M JUST KIDDING! LET ALL YOUR SPAZIC-NESS OUT! WOOO!! :jump: I know how hard it is to write the VERY. 1ST. CHAPTER. (scary words) so please, TAKE YOUR TIME WITH IT! AND DON'T FORGET TO HAVE A HAPPY FACE! =)D :dancow: (It's OK. I know I'm weird.)

Okay so here it is!!
the 1st chapter!!

Chapter 1: The Secret Found

So it was a normal day in Tokyo, Japan and Kagome and I were walking home from school after we left the girls back at Wacdonalds{HA}. Kagome and I got done early and I thought I would help Kagome on her make-up work since she was so far behind.As we were walking Kagome said, "Thanks for helping me with everything, Kiara. I really appreciate it." she smiled.
"It's no big. Anything to help." I also smiled back.

Well, we finally walked up the long stairway up to Kagome's house, and I mean LOOONNNGGG, WHEW! {{Dramatic Affect hehe}}. "Oh wait, Kagome. I don't think I'll need anything so I'm gonna run my stuff home, okay?"
"Okay, I'll be up in my room, just come right in." and with that I walk off to take my stuff home.

~*Back at Kagome's house*~

"I hope she hurries before I have to go back to--" and Kagome's words were cut off when she ran into a slim, tall figure.
"Hey, Kagome. What's taking you so long!? Inuyasha growled.
"Oh shut up Inuyasha. I just got back from school and I can't go back yet. My friend, Kiara is helping me catch up in school." Kagome argued.
"Well we don't have all day!!" he said.

~*Back at my house*~

"Okay, all done." and I started walking back to Kagome's house. When I got there, I heard Kagome's voice and a man's voice. So I walked up behind Kagome and he jumped right in front of her, like he was trying to protect her.
"WHO"S THAT KAGOME!?!" he snarled.
"Oh stop it Inuyasha. That's Kiara. The one I told you about!" Kagome sighed.
"Um...who's that is what I should be asking..." I looked confused. Right then, Inuyasha started stiffing me. What a FREAK!!What is he doing!!?

Kagome looked at him just as confused as me. "Inuyasha, STOP IT!"
"What? I'm just sniffing her. She smells different than a normal human." he protested.
"Excuse me? Normal human, and what are you, some--" I stop talking when I saw the trianglar fluffy ears on top his head. "OMG, are those ears real!! Can i touch 'em?"
"Feh, spare me."
"Inuyasha...." Kagome warned and Inuyasha looked at her in fright like he knew what was coming. "Kagome don't say i--" and he was cut off by Kagome saying "OSUWARI!!!!!!" when he slamed into the ground head first. I couldn't help BUT laugh and bend down and touch them while Inuyasha was passed out.{HA}

"So that explains it!! Your a dog-dude-thing." I exclamed.
"Come on, I'll explain everything up in my room where no one can over-hear us. Kagome started walking inside and I follow while Inuyasha was just starting to get up. He mangaged to mumble out "You had to say huh, Kagome....wait don't leave me!!" and he jumps up and runs inside with us.

So when we got inside up to her room, we all sat down and she started explaining everything.
"Okay, well the truth is....I haven't really been sick, I've been with Inuyasha this whole time when I'm not at school."
"Wait, so you've been skipping school to be with him?" I asked.
"No no no, well sort of. I've been back with him 500 years in the past, in the Feudal Era." and I just looked confused as ever.
"Well, I was wondering about Inuyasha's choice of clothes....now I know, he had no choice but to dress like that."
"Yeah, and to explain why he has dog ears....he's half-dog demon. See his father, the great dog demon general, Inu No Taisho ruled the lands of the west and that's how he met Inu's mother, Izayoi, I heard she was very beautiful."
"She was...." Inuyasha said sadly.
"Yeah, his father died when Inuyasha was a baby so he never knew him and his mother died when he was just a kid, so he had to learn to raise himself. That is why he's so ruff around the edges sometimes...even tho he had a brother, Sesshomaru." she explained more.
"HALF-BROTHER!!!!!!!!WHO'S A BASTARD!!!" Inuyasha screamed.

Kagome sighed and continued. "So he never had any real family until....--" and she cut herself off with sadness.
"What's wrong Kagome?..." I questioned her sadness.
"Oh, nothing....just as I was saying, Inu never had any real family until his first love, Kikyo came along and it turns out that I'm the reincarnation of Kikyo." Kagome smiled abit.
"Really? wow..." I smiled. She's lucky, Inuyasha is soooooooo cute.... and I looked at Inuyasha with a dreamy look then I snapped out of it when Kagone started talking again.

"Anyway, then they were ripped apart by the evil Naraku, who made them believe they decived each other so Kikyo pinned Inuyasha the the Sacred Tree for 50 years in a deep sleep spell, using a sacred arrow. Then I came along, and broke the spell, since I was the only one who could, being the reincarnation and all. So I've been back there with Inuyasha looking for the Shikon No Tama shards...because I accidently shattered it into hundreds of pieces." :chidorisd: "My bad...." Kagome smiled insecurely at Inuyasha who just looked pissed off.

I couldn't help but just stare at the both of them blank faced because I didn't know what to say. Then I finally got the words to say. "So....you guys have been looking....for shards...of the Sacred Jewl of Four Souls....cause Kagome broke it...."

"Well, we also have friends to help us, a little fox demon named Shippo, who's like a son or a little brother to me, and Inuyasha keeps beating him up. Then there's the perverted monk, Miroku, who always is rubbing the asses of every pretty girl he meets, so watch your back." "Not to mention, he will ask you to bear his children" Inuyasha laughed and I backed off in disgust.
"Kagome, does he really?" I asked and she nodded.
"Yeah, well then there is a demon exterminator named Sango, who's like a sister to me, and her pet cat demon, Kirara. She always helps us with flying cause she may look sweet and innocent when she's a small kitten, but she turns into a furious sabor-tooth cat demon with two tails." I just looked like WOW!!

So when Kagome was finished with the main parts of the story, we all jsut talked about what she explained. WOW!! That sounds awesome. I wish I could go.

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So there you have it!!!!!!!
:excited:
1st Chapter!!!!! WEEEEEEEE!!!!!!!!!!

oh just a little info....the Italisized{sp?} words are what ppl are thinking! :dancow:
and a quick question, since im new, how do u make the different text colors show up? I tried so many times and they wouldn't..:chidorisd:

GRRREAT 1ST CHAPPIE! Excuse me while I do my happy dance. (YAYYAYYAY 1st chappie! YAYAYAY!) Ok. I'm done. Hehe! Dog-dude-thing. LOL Anyway, sorry Kiara, I can't help you with the text color thing, I've tried it a MILLION times too but I can't seem to get it to work either! It's probably cuz I'm new too.... I just decided to forget about it cuz it wouldn't work. :dancow:

Thanks DemonChild!!!!
WOOOOO!!! :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow:
gotta love that cow!!!!!!!!! :excited: :excited: :excited:
well thanks again for the support!!
i really need it! :moji: :moji:

NO PROB! I luv to support people!!!! YES YES GOTTA LOVE THAT COW!!!!!!!!!! :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow:

Whoa. I think clicked the cow a few to many times..........

I like your story!!

well i think youre doin ok for your first ficcy.
a word of advice, if you want to know haw to get better, ask people like
Naome-inuyasha, Jostanos, and Baka-Neko
they are really kool and Naome-inuyasha and Oshiori are really good writers.
i am a writer myself but i am sorta a newbie myself.(but not as much as you no offense!)
Ask them for help, there is no shame in asking for help
o yea, and please continue my friend!!
Rachael Mosley
AKA
Kyoto,or Inu&kaglover07

Thank you! all of you for your support!
Yeah DemonChild, I think you did click it too many times!

Lady ZeiKumi, Thanks!!

inu&kaglover07, thanks for the advice!
i might ask for their help later...right now im replying to everyone replies..
{Cuz im cool like that! :excited: lol}

just a word to all!

I'm working on the 2nd chappie!!!!!
:dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow:

YAY Kiara! You've got more fans! Sorry I clicked the cow so many times. I was in a blind frensy, I swear! Please don't sue me for smiley abuse. :chidorisd:

Don't worry!
I won't
im not that mean :excited: :excited: :excited:

wow that was really interesting. I'm working on my first fan fic too though im already on chapter 5 almost 6 and yeah... but other than that great story update soon please and before i post read the story called love thats my first one and im still working on it so you should read it and the changing color thing i think i know but im not sure ill reply again later and tell you if i figure it out ok?

This is a great fanfic. i juststarted yesterday and a notaced this. Great Job!!!!!!!!!!!!!
:excited: :kicking: :boxing: :victory: :kittylove: :music: :) :cutelaugh: :moji: :daydream: :cheer: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow: horay!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! party!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

well thanks!

whatupfu12, okay, ill check it out later! k?

inu-elrick, thanks a buch im glad u like it!

ill update soon everyone! so dont like go :run4urlife: :run4urlife: :run4urlife: :run4urlife: on me! lol

Hi Kiara! I won't like go on you! :kittylove: I'm stayin right here! Update soon! :daydream: :dancow: :excited: :kicking:

yes update soon

sorry to keep everyone waiting but
IM STUCK IN A WRITERS BLOCK! :chidorisd:
ill get updated as soon as i get my ideas in order!

OMG! I hate writer's block! It's like your mind turns to mush and you feel like ripping your hair out! We've all been through it Kiara, well at least I have. :dancow:

i know!
it not like ive got a big writers blck but i cant seem to get my ideas right in my head!
like the ideas from to the 2nd chappie are mixed in with ideas that i have planned to come later! :chidorisd:

Isn't it soo annoying when that happens? Hey, did you get my PM? I sent you something! :dancow:

yeah it's very annoying!
okay ill go check! but it doesnt say i've got anything in there yet

I was pretty sure I sent you something! If you didn't get anything then it must have been my bad! Sorry! If you didn't get it I'll send it again. :dancow:

okay
hopefully i get this time! :victory:

i like this story yep yep yep.ummm im bored

okay so here's what everyone's been waiting for!
but it's only part of Chapter 2!
Chapter 2: Back to the Feudal Era with another shock

“So Kagome, when are you going back?” I asked curiously.
“Oh, well that’s why Inuyasha’s here…he came to get me but I told him that you were coming back to help me catch up.” She replied.
“Yeah, and we are leaving right after you’re done!!” Inuyasha butted in.
Kagome and I just sighed. “Geez, Inuyasha, I’ve only known you for-“ I cut myself off to look at a clock. “about an hour now and you are just like Kagome explained and the girls took badly.”
“What?! Kagome, you said things about me?!” Inuyasha demanded an answer.
“Yeah I said a few things, but nothing way too bad. Inuyasha calm down!” Kagome said calmly.

Right then Inuyasha picked up Kagome’s bag and filled it with supplies.
“Inuyasha, what are you doing?” Kagome asked but Inuyasha ignored her and kept filling her bag with supplies.
I’m guessing he’s packing up to leave cause he’s pissed off. I thought.

When Inuyasha was done he demanded, “Come on Kagome!! We’re leaving now!”
“But Inu-“ Kagome was sliced of her words by Inuyasha pulling her up to her feet and picking her bag up.
“Inuyasha, osuwari!” Kagome looked blank faced.
“Ugh…you just love torturing me don’t you Kagome.” Inuyasha groaned. Stupid bitch
“We’re not leaving, I want to spend some more time with my best friend!” Kagome argued.

So Inuyasha sat back down with a ‘humph’ and I just rolled my eyes.
“Geez Inuyasha, why you got your kimono all up in a bunch, calm down!” I protested.
“Whatever” Inuyasha said in his normal ‘whatever’ tone.

So Kagome got out her books and I started helping her with Math, since that was my best subject and I usually did well in it.
“Okay, so Kagome, the square root of 400 is?” I asked.
“Ummm, how in the hell am I supposed to know? I haven’t been here to learn that.” Kagome huffed.
“Okay, I’ll tell you, but you have to explain how I got it, OK?”
“Okay, now spill!
“Okay, it is…”

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HA I stop there!
I’m soooooo mean! Lol:spooky: :spooky:
I’ll post the rest later!

Man! You are mean! How the hell is anyone supposed to know the square root of 5,280??????? ANYWAY Great update. God, I say 'anyway' too much. :kittylove:

it's not that hard to figure out
im going into high school so ive learned that stuff!
i know i sound like a smarty pants
i pay attention....when i want to! :hilarious:

DANG! Why do I have to be the youngest all the time? I'm just starting middle school. Grrr. :cryriver: Or waaah! Or something...

ahhh middle school..or as we call it here Jr. High!
well it be over before you know it!
im gonna be tortured cuz im a freshman!
and at our high school...freshman get trash canned...get yelled in their faces 'FRESHMAN SUCK'...and all kinds of stuff! :chidorisd:
wooooooohhhhhhhhoooooooo for me! :hilarious: :dancow: :dancow: :dancow:

I sure hope it's over before I know it. But now you've made me scared to leave middle school/Jr. high! I don't wanna get trash canned and stuff. But I'll get through it! I will be strong! Besides, if anyone ever trys to trash can me I'll kick they're sorry ass. :devil: You don't mess me. :neko: Oh great, now I sound scary.

yeah seriously!
if anyone tries to stuff me in a trash can
i stuff my drumsticks up their ass! {and seriously i am a drummer so i have the right!} :dancow: :dancow: :dancow:

well i know from experience that it wont be as bad as they say it is, i am a sophmore this year and i loved my freshman year!!
but i just wanted to let you know, no hard feelings but

GOD U STUPID FRESHMAN,UPDATE!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
geez!

Um, Kirara, I don't think you need to talk about that.
*cough* though I totally agree-_-*

Well, anyway.
GOOD story so far, keep it up, cuz if ya don't I'll have ta hunt you down and cut you like a fish....I mean-have firm talk with you.....ummmm.....yeah....
I'm gunna go now....:faint:

And Inu&kaglover-don't call freshmen stupid! I'm a fresh bait-I meant freshman!