Tis Rain! And my old ficcy.. I decided to post this... yeaahh

Kagome:
I awoke and shivered. I pulled my ragged kimono more tightly around me. I have been outside for more then a week now. With barely any food. So yes, I was cold and hungry.
I got up and looked around. I was surounded by a mass of twigs branches and, of course, trees. I got up and pushed my way through the branches and the warm sulight hit me.
I sighed.
If only it was always like this. It had been raining most of the time. I then walked off in search of some food.
I was wandering around for about, 10 minutes before beautiful lady luck found me.
I found a patch of wild mushrooms. I knew a lot about mushrooms and berries. In this time ,Fedual Japan, you needed to. It was a hard life if poor. My parents taught me that.
That was before they both died. Then I was taken in by that, that, That WITCH! I thought of it every day.
I sighed and picked the mushrooms, found some dry wood, and started a fire. I cooked, ate, then left. Continueing on my way. I didn't know where I was going, anywere, just not back to HER house.
I walked on, it was a pretty normal day. Then i heard footsteps around and behind me. I walked faster. Then all of a sudden....Bandits. They surrounded me.
"Well well well, what do we have here?" One of them said, he looked like the leader. "Looks like a pretty lady." another said. "G-Go away!" I said.They laughed and came closer.
"Sorry pretty lady, that just ain't gonna happen!" The... leader?
Soon, they began to beat me, since I was still pretty hungry, it wasn't long before i blacked out... But not before i heard a voice say.
"Leave her alone!"

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Hope you like it<3

Certainly seems interesting enough.

However, I did notice a few grammar errors.

First sentence, you might want to try something different. To me, it just sounds odd. Maybe something like, "As I awoke, my body began to shiver in the cold." Your fourth sentence, I'd change the period before it to a comma. That way, it ends up like this, "I have been outside for more than a week now, with barely any food."

Next paragraph, second sentence, you spelled surrounded wrong. After twigs, put a comma. Third sentence you might want to alter a bit. Try something like, "I got up and pushed my way through the branches. As I broke clear from them, I felt the bright sunlight hit me." Then, maybe you could add, "I sighed" to the last paragraph. Some people might disagree with me, but that's just what I think.

Third sentence in the next paragraph seems odd to me. Try something like, "Desperate for food, I walked away from the trees to search for some."

Next paragraph, lose the comma and spell out ten instead. It looks sloppy and amateurish in writing, unless your using it to tell time. In the second to last sentence, add a comma between "life" and "if".

Next paragraph, second sentence, lose the capital "t" before witch.

First sentence, try, "I sighed as I picked up the mushrooms. Then, I found some dry wood. Moments later, I had a fire going from the wood I found." Second and third sentences should be joined with a comma and you spelled continuing wrong. Fourth sentence could actually be made into three, like this: "I didn't know where I was going. I guess just anywhere. Just not back to HER house."

Next paragraph, you might want to change the first sentence. It doesn't seem quite right. My suggestion would be, "As I walked on, I noticed that the day seemed a pretty normal one." Next sentence, comma after "then" and capitalize "I". Next sentence, comma after then.

Next paragraph, spell "one" without the capital. But a period after said, making "He looked like the leader." a seperate sentence. Start another paragraph before "Looks like a pretty lady." And another one before "G-Go away."

Next paragraph, don't capitalize "the".

Next paragraph, after "beat me", use a period instead. Then, before the last sentence in the paragraph, don't capitalize "but". Then, add "Leave her alone" to the previous paragraph.

Whoo! I'm sorry for all that. It's just that I believe everyone has the potential to be a great writer. Sometimes they just need someone to help show them how to improve. I believe this has potential. Just keep on writing. If you need an editor or someone to proofread your updates, let me know. I'll be glad to help.

Keep up the good work. ^^