Re-post of the first chapter futher down the page. sorry about this mess. thanks enjoy...


Lets start this with, Iam new to this site, I have read a few other fics to this point. Therefore if i have taken names or alternate storylines I apologize. It's purely an indictment of my own lack of creativity.


Now I will be introducing three new characters into the storyline.


Disclaimer; I do not own Inuyasha or any characters their in. I do own many other things, like the characters I created in this story. Rumiko Takahashi is the owner, lord and eer...ya know... Chapter one; There is another Flashback;
A young twelve year old Sesshoumaru returns home from a long sixteen month yokai training ritual.
“Father I have finished my...”He stops mid-sentence. Peering across his father’s grand chamber, catching a glimpse of two figures engaged in conversation. ‘Something’s not right.’ The young demon thinks. The two conclude there colloquy, a low scratchy voice calls. “Sesshoumaru, come here my son.” He begins his advance to his father’s request. Passing the tall, powerful figure, his demonic aura pierced his senses.

The impressive dignitary pauses as he passes the unfledged yokai, draws in a deep breath. Tasting the desiccant air that hung in the room. From one breath balanced across his pallet, he knows his younger brother has completely found his path on the very long journey to becoming a great demon lord.

“Sesshoumaru,” he trailed off with a low growl.

“Tenshinomaru, what brings you here?”

“Fft…little one, my time is much too dear to waste on the likes of you.” As he moves past his younger sibling, he seems to glide out of the room. His aura engulfing everything caught within its radius. As if to be investigating all it contacts.

“Sesshoumaru, come stand with me.” The young yokai adheres to his lords commands.

“My son we are approaching a very dark time. Power balances will deviate innumerably. There will be those who seek this power for their own malignant desires.” Sesshoumaru can sense his fathers constrained emotion.

“Soon my son a great encumbrance will become yours and yours alone. I must be certain that you will be prepared once that time comes.” His father places his hand on his young son’s shoulder, a show of confidence to his accomplishments to date.

As his father leaves the room, Sesshoumaru can’t help but to ponder the words his lord spoke. He calmly collects his thoughts, draws a long intentional breath. Slowly makes his way out of the chamber and back to his quarters.

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Flash forward
Sesshoumaru sits on a mountain bluff, drumming his claws across the hilt of the tensiega.

‘Why father, why do you detest me so. You curse me with this feckless blade, you entrust your sacred tomb to Inuyasha, your half-breed, bollix. A mistake that cost you your life, yet you still leave him your most cherished possession. I should be the one who controls your affairs. It is my birth right.’ His thoughts race between his fathers calculated intensions. And that of the worthless half breed brother, Inuyasha who seems to have everything handed to him on a golden platter.

‘I can’t fathom why my father would make it impossible for me to wield the tetsiega?’ His growing derision for Inuyasha is compounded after their many confrontations prove unprolific.

“Lord Sesshoumaru…huh, huh, lord Sesshoumaru!” A winded and overwrought Jakken totters his way to the powerful lord’s side.

“Lord Sessh-shomaru…Oh…please don’t be angry with me.” Pleadingly he looks towards the magnificent sculpture. His golden eyes slowly turn to his imp cohort.

”What is it Jakken?” in a calm icy tone.

“It’s not my fault…Please lord Sesshoumaru.”

“Quiet, Jakken.” Sesshoumaru rises from his rocky tutorage. Cast his eyes to the south.

“She took her didn’t she?”

“Yes my lord, but…who was she?”

Sesshoumaru pauses as he looks out over the valley, and to the south.

“Jakken take Ah and Un and meet at the Goshinboku (sacred tree outside of Kaede’s village.) In three days time.”

“But lord Sesshoumaru…” The tiny imp is cut off from expounding any further.

“Jakken.” His voice descending in volume and virulence.

“Please do as I have asked of you. I must tend to this matter with haste.” Sesshoumaru gathers himself as if he were preparing to utter something he thought would never let slip past his tongue. Words he knows that will leave a bitter taste more trenchant than even his own poisons.

“Jakken, you must find my (pausing as if to quell the uneasiness of the words falling from his lips.) Find Inuyasha. You must convince him and the priestess girl he travels with to congress at the sacred tree. Jakken it is very important that the girl Kagome be there as well. Do what you must to make it so.” Never once turning to face his quivering vassal.

“Umm… Yes me lord I will not fail you!” In a firm still searching for confidence tone.

“Three days time. Three days.” Muttered the contemptible urchin. As the two make there way in opposite directions, the greasy green imp can only think of the words his powerful lord had just spoke.
‘Why would lord Sesshoumaru require the assistance of that ungrateful hanyo Inuyasha? More so why he insisted that the human girl be there as well? _0000000000000000_

If anyone can help me with the paragraphing, and such please... I need help! If ya can teach me, i will correct this. I laid it all out and it came out like this???? HELP!!!

Mm...an interesting idea, yes. ^^

Hard to read, yes. XD

Okay, what you want to do, is after a different person talks, press enter to create a space btween each set of dialouge, as for paragraphing, each time you start to describe something new, or if you make the paragraph 5-8 scentences long, you start a new one.

The wording was actually really well done! Lots of big words and such, which isn't what new members writing their first fanfic does! I'm impressed with that, as well as capturing the emotion and the CORRECT personality of the characters. ^-^ (I know that was hard for me when I first wrote my fic. XD Sessh was too damn nice...XD)

Well, if you need anymore help, then feel free to ask or PM me, I'm here to help if you need it.

Oh, and please continue your story whenever you can. ^^

~Kari

Yes well I did all that and when i posted it, reverted to that. Is there anyway to go back and lay it out correctly? Oh thank you for your kind remarks. Dont worry about Sesshoumaru... that nasty streak is still in tact.

Well i cant seem to figure out how to fix this. I know its very tuff to read. im considering re-posting it. What i did was pasted this over from my word program. Maybe thats why I cant fix it once its posted? I dont know. Any help would be greatly appreciated. thanks... Oh and I suck at typing so re-doing it would be a bummer.

Yeah, I think you need to repost it. What word program you using? Microsoft Word?

Yeah its Micro soft word. Do you recomend just writing out in the posting area?

No, directly typing and posting I don't recommend. The problem with that is that you don't have what your writing saved on your own computer. What you could try is this: type it out in Word, save, then copy and paste the text you wish to post as a chapter or update into Notepad, and then do the formatting that we recommend there. Look at my stories and others formatted like them of course to see what I mean. After doing that, then copy and paste the text into the posting area. It should come out properly then. If you need help on bolding, italicizing and underlining text, as well as changing text size occasionally, I'd be glad to help, as I utilize all those things in many of my story updates.

Okay I need to apologize. Iam truely a rookie. I messed that first chapter post so bad, I'll have to re-post here. Hang in there with me. It can only go up from here.

Disclaimer; Rumiko Takahashi owns Inuyasha, I do not. I do own the characters that i created within this storyline.

_A Chance At Redemption_

Chapter one; there is another


Flashback; A young twelve year old Sesshoumaru returns home from a long sixteen month yokai training ritual.

“Father I have finished my...”He stops mid-sentence. Peering across his father’s grand chamber, catching a glimpse of two figures engaged in conversation.

‘Something’s not right.’ The young demon thinks. The two conclude there colloquy, a low scratchy voice calls.

“Sesshoumaru, come here my son.” He begins his advance to his father’s request. Passing the tall, powerful figure, his demonic aura pierced his senses.

The impressive dignitary pauses as he passes the unfledged yokai, draws in a deep breath. Tasting the desiccant air that hung in the room. From one breath balanced across his pallet, he knows his younger brother has completely found his path on the very long journey to becoming a great demon lord.

“Sesshoumaru,” he trailed off with a low growl.
“Tenshinomaru, what brings you here?”

“Fft…little one, my time is much too dear to waste on the likes of you.”
As he moves past his younger sibling, he seems to glide out of the room. His aura engulfing everything caught within its radius. As if to be investigating all it contacts.

“Sesshoumaru, come stand with me.” The young yokai adheres to his lords commands.


“My son we are approaching a very dark time. Power balances will deviate innumerably. There will be those who seek this power for their own malignant desires.” Sesshoumaru can sense his fathers constrained emotion.


“Soon my son a great encumbrance will become yours and yours alone. I must be certain that you will be prepared once that time comes.”
His father places his hand on his young son’s shoulder, a show of confidence to his accomplishments to date.

As his father leaves the room, Sesshoumaru can’t help but to ponder the words his lord spoke. He calmly collects his thoughts, draws a long intentional breath. Slowly makes his way out of the chamber and back to his quarters.
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Flash forward
Sesshoumaru sits on a mountain bluff, drumming his claws across the hilt of the tensiega.

‘Why father, why do you detest me so. You curse me with this feckless blade, you entrust your sacred tomb to Inuyasha, your half-breed, bollix. A mistake that cost you your life, yet you still leave him your most cherished possession. I should be the one who controls your affairs. It is my birth right.’

His thoughts race between his fathers calculated intensions. And that of the worthless half breed brother, Inuyasha who seems to have everything handed to him on a golden platter.

'I can’t fathom why my father would make it impossible for me to wield the tetsiega?’ His growing derision for Inuyasha is compounded after their many confrontations prove unprolific.

“Lord Sesshoumaru…huh, huh, lord Sesshoumaru!” A winded and overwrought Jakken totters his way to the powerful lord’s side.

“Lord Sessh-shomaru…Oh…please don’t be angry with me.” Pleadingly he looks towards the magnificent sculpture. His golden eyes slowly turn to his imp cohort.

”What is it Jakken?” in a calm icy tone.

“It’s not my fault…Please lord Sesshoumaru.”

“Quiet, Jakken.” Sesshoumaru rises from his rocky tutorage. Cast his eyes to the south.

“She took her didn’t she?”

“Yes my lord, but…who was she?”

Sesshoumaru pauses as he looks out over the valley, and to the south.
“Jakken take Ah and Un and meet at the Goshinboku (sacred tree outside of Kaede’s village.) In three days time.”

“But lord Sesshoumaru…” The tiny imp is cut off from expounding any further.

“Jakken.” His voice descending in volume and virulence.


“Please do as I have asked of you. I must tend to this matter with haste.”

Sesshoumaru gathers himself as if he were preparing to utter something he thought would never let slip past his tongue. Words he knows that will leave a bitter taste more trenchant than even his own poisons.

“Jakken, you must find my (pausing as if to quell the uneasiness of the words falling from his lips.) Find Inuyasha. You must convince him and the priestess girl he travels with to congress at the sacred tree. Jakken it is very important that the girl Kagome be there as well. Do what you must to make it so.” Never once turning to face his quivering vassal.

“Umm… Yes me lord I will not fail you!” In a firm still searching for confidence tone.

“Three days time. Three days.” Muttered the contemptible urchin. As the two make there way in opposite directions, the greasy green imp can only think of the words his powerful lord had just spoke.

‘Why would lord Sesshoumaru require the assistance of that ungrateful hanyo Inuyasha? More so why he insisted that the human girl be there as well?

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well I went back into ms word and im hoping that formated it properly this time.If this doesnt work I will re-write the first chapter by friday night... Hmm... I hope this works.

Try spacing out the paragraphs.

well not really, but I think ill move on to the second chapter tho... Im over this. but now I know what needs to be done... peace

You need a beta-ing thing.

Yes. If you have to, edit the post itself. You know how to do that?

Yeah it looked great, all spaced and paragraphed then it comes out all jacked-up. It must be the old word program I wrote it on. It was 03. So I think it just sucks. Most likely scenario...ITS ME!!...DOH!!!

..I dunno.

Just quote the text and enter every paragraph or so..

His text is weird.. I have to space it twice to get it to space once.

Is the 'edit' button in your posts not working?

I can't really help you out on the Word issues. I don't use Windows, I use Linux, therefore I use OpenOffice.

well for some reason i could edit this one, but not the first one... Hmmm anyway thats a little better. must crawl before i walk

Okay, I hope I figured this out? Gonna try and post chapter two now.

Disclaimer; I do not own InuYasha, never have never will. Rumiko Takahashi is O/G truth.

Chapter two; those last words



Sesshomaru wastes no time advancing through the trees, blurring from one opening to the next. Like a dance, he calmly slides by and through tree branches. Nary a leaf does he touch as his majestic promenade winds through the country side.He finds himself reflecting back to words his father spoke before he died.


“Tell me Sesshomaru have you someone to protect?”


‘At that time and even up until now, there was never a thought of protecting someone. Yet I find myself rushing after her, the human girl. What is it about her that compels me to allow her to stay in my preservation? She is human, and I am no ones protector.’
Sesshomaru’s forehead crimps deeper, with the abstruse thoughts swimming in his head.


‘Yet how many times have I lept from combat to save her. I’m not obligated to this child, a human child.’ His fists balled and clinched in an outward display of his acrimony.


‘I don’t have a compassionate bone in my body. Still, I drew the tensiega to revive her lifeless body. Yet I did not care whether she lived or not. Maybe I should’ve left her there to the natural procedure of death, sparing me of this conundrum.’


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“Kagome...! Lookout…! Barked the white haired hanyou,
”arrggh”… In her typical school girl squeal. The raven haired beauty is thrown from her hilltop advantage.


The Ogre demon lord bearing down on InuYasha, has transformed into his full demon state, glowing green eyes, surrounding his fire red irises. Standing in a meadow filled with a wide variety of spring flowers, the stark contrast of beast and beauty. When the demons eyes focus on his enemies they become irrational, and filled with visions of their worst fears.


A situation that Sango is currently dealing with, her flailing has brought out Miroku’s deepest concerns. He kneels down to the fallen slayer, attempting to cast away the convocation that has Sango incapacitated. His sutra’s and prayers prove ineffectual.


Not finding this a simple task, what with Sango’s thrashing about, tearing at her demon slayer outfit and armor.

“Shippo help me!” The monk calls to his spry fox demon friend.

“Miroku what’s wrong with Sango?” His eyes widen to the display of his cohort writhing and squirming on the ground.

Shippo and the demon cat Kirara stand guard over Miroku as his concerns deepen for Sango. Her shrieks begin to send icy chills down the monk’s spine. Her cries seem to capture the group’s attention. With the exception of Inuyasha.

“Stop it, please Miroku. Don’t do this. Miroku, no!” the hardened warrior struggles with her visions.

“Miroku what is she talking about?” quipped the young fox.

“I’m not sure Shippo, but we have to get her to a safer spot. Help me drag her behind this bluff.”

“Kagome…! Are you all right…?’ The slender vanquisher draped in his red kimono scurries to the fallen priestess girl.

“Inu-Yasha,” In a faint whispery cry. Kagome now kneeling and brushing her self clean.

“Are you okay?” in a concerned and inquiring tone.
The hanyou stands over the girl who he promised to not allow any harm to come to.

“Rrrrgggh…Wind Scar!”
InuYasha grips his tessiega, as the winds converge and surround the fang. The oversized blade makes its way from the recoiled form of its wielder, striking at the ground, swirling winds race towards the intended target.

A perfect hit, the wind scar tearing into the great ogres flesh. Ripping and cutting deep into his torso. Until inevitably, his body succumbs to the unrelenting impulsion of energy and wind that the tessiega has revealed.

As the pieces of ogre fall about the lush meadow. Now ripped, and chewed like weeks old carrion. The gelatinous chunks of demon that are strewn back from the impact of the violent conflagration, eerily and steadily begin to pulsate and converge.

“Kagome, I need your help!” Miroku calls for his traveling companion.
She gathers her senses and her bow; makes her way toward her anxious friend.

“Miroku, what’s wrong? What is Sango saying? Why is she…?”

“I’m not sure, but I think it has to do with the demon eyes! When he gazed at Sango she fell into this state. Nothing I’ve done has seemed to calm her.”

“What can I do?” puzzled by the distraught motion, and cries of her friend Sango.

“Help me hold her down.”

Kagome reaches out to her stricken cohort, as strong feelings begin to rise in her chest. Her hands draw in towards Sango’s plight, they begin to glow a blue hue. Kagome’s touch to Sango’s skin reveals a dramatic pulsation.

“Thump, thump…thump, thump!”
The sensation nearly causes Kagome to pull free from her friends arm.

“Kagome wha- what’s going on? A concerted Miroku questions.

“I’m not exactly sure…but I think Sango is going to be fine now Miroku.

“Kagome that was amazing!” chirped Shippo the diminutive fox youkai. With Kirara, Sango’s faithful two tail, assuring the safety of the four friends re-grouping at her fiery paws.

“Hey you guys wanna quit yer yappin, and get over here. I don’t think this over yet!” InuYasha bark’s in an antagonized tone, firmly re-gripping his altruist the tessiega.


Out in the quiet but torn meadow a sinister convocation is occurring, the afflicted portions of the great ogre lord have begun to coalesce

“I don’t like the looks of this!” the golden eyed hanyou exclaims, as the rest of his party falls in. With the exception of Sango, not really sure of what had just taken place.

“Kirara!” Sango weakly calls to her demon friend. Help InuYasha and the others. The confused demon slayer looks down at her armor and garments. They seem to be torn and open as if the visions that were flashing to and fro in her mind were somehow true.

‘Could Miroku really have done those things? It seemed so real. No it can’t be, Kagome and Inuyasha would have done something to stop him?…right? I just don’t know.’

“Kagome you and Kirara get up high. Try an get a good shot this time…
And don’t miss!” InuYasha grumbles through his request.

The ninth grader scoffs at the incredulous remark, grips her bow, with her quiver one arrow shy of its capacity, and cinched tightly to her back. Jumping atop the battle hardened flying cat, looks back at the oblivious dog-boy. Simply making her point to him with a burning glare and one rigidly placed…”Hem!!!”

Out in the field, the convergence is complete. And the regenerated ogre has begun to conjure his ability to ball an enormous amount of energy in his hands and hurl it towards his foes.

“Miroku after I cut this thing back into a million pieces you…” Miroku jumps in on him.

“Gotcha InuYasha, Ill clean this guy out!” He eagerly displays his readiness.

“InuYasha…he has two jewel shards in his back!” Kagome calls from her vantage high over the field.

“Rrrggh!” InuYasha’s eyes narrow in on the demon.

“That’s it!... Kagome, are you ready?

Just as the ogre lords attack finds its mark exploding at the feet of Miroku and InuYasha. Separating the two from there mini frontline entrenchment.

“InuYahsa!” a high concerning shrill emotes from deep within her chest.
“Are you alright?”

A somewhat disheveled InuYasha brushes himself off. No worse for the ware, pretty much unharmed from the discharge that sent the two careening in opposite directions.

“Fft… I aint hurt, but this guys goin down! Kagome you ready?”

“Ready InuYasha!” The taut bow string creaks with anticipation of releasing its energy towards the intensions of the young priestess re-incarnate.

Simultaneously the demon prepares another attack, letting go with an intense green power surge.

“Ffwwpt!” Kagome’s looses an arrow, as it leaves the bow Kagome’s ability to purify becomes evident once again. The power begins to encompass the arrow. Its flight is perfect.

“Backlash wave!” bellows the sinewy dog demon hanyou.

A convergence of energies collides between the two adversaries, the backlash wave engulfing the ogres attack. As Kagome’s arrow finds its mark True to her aim, burrowing deep into the demons back, prying free the two shikon jewel shards from the monstrosity, and enveloping him in a paralyzing blue glow.

Tessiega’s backlash wave rapidly moving in on the opposer, tearing into him like before. Rendering him into pieces cast about the meadow.

“Kagome where are the shards?” a grunting and heaving InuYasha yells to Kagome.

“Umm…oh I see them; they’re way over there embedded in that tree!”

“Okay my turn!” the monk unravels his prayer beads, slides the blessed garment from his palm, turns to the open field littered with torn body parts.

"Wind tunnel!” winds swirl at first then violently chose there coarse. Into the void goes anything caught within the monks curse. It doesn’t take long before the coagulating remains are swept clean from the meadow.

“Hey is everyone okay?” InuYasha asks of his friends as they gather around their fearless and simple leader.

“Kagome?
“Oh its just a scrape, no biggie…”

“What about you guys?”

“Yeah…but I’m not to sure about Sango? Shippo showing concern for his friend and protector.

“Yeah… I guess I’m fine.” The monk murmurs as his head turns from the group and slowly slouches into his chest.

“What about you Sango?” InuYasha’s query is completely blind to what had happen to Sango in the past ten minutes.

“I’m sorry InuYasha,… Kagome,…I, I think I need some time to myself to figure out what happen here, if you would excuse me everyone.” Sango pulls herself together.

“I’ll meet you in Kaede’s village in a couple of days.”

“That’s fine Sango.” Kagome assures her friend.

“No way!” shouts InuYasha.
‘Were so close to Naraku. I can practically smell him! We need to keep going! No way! I say…”

“InuYasha SIT !!!”

Kaede’s beads quickly overcome the dog-demon. Subjugating the hanyou and firmly planting him to the meadow where he’d just stood victorious.

“Sango take as long you need. We’ll wait for you in Kaede’s village.”

“Thank you Kagome…Kirara come.” Sango ascends her two tail and vanishes over the break.

“What’d you do that for Kagome?”

“Quiet InuYasha! Sometimes you’re so clueless.”

“Yeah InuYasha, even I knew she needed to be alone and I’m just a kid.” Chortled Shippo.

“Hmm, well how the hell am I supposed to…Ahh forget it. Let’s just get those jewel shards and get out of this place. That smell is starting to get to me.”

The group make there way to the tree. Kagome’s focus is lost when she notices Miroku’s outward solemn display.

“Miroku what’s wrong?” Kagome slides into her friends stride, interlocking her left arm through his right, a show of trust in her good friend.

“I’m not sure Kagome, but that whole thing with Sango was…well, like she was being taken advantage of, she was fighting, and resisting with all her will…Kagome?"

“Yes Miroku?” she pulls the monk in tighter to her side.

“Sango kept saying my name the whole time as if I was the one trying to accost her. I admit my hands roam, but I would never push myself on her in that manner.”

“I know Miroku…I know more than you can ever imagine.” She winks and bumps her hip to his, loosens her arm lock, then gleefully glides away from her friend, leaving him feeling a bit better, but puzzled about her words, and her vernal actions.

“Hey Kagome where are those shards?” InuYasha pry’s in his usual manner.

“Hmm…that’s weird, they were right here, in this tree. Huh! I can sense them moving InuYasha! That way!”

“Rrrrg…I smell him now! You guys stay here, I’ll be right back.”

‘He can smell him.’ Thought Kagome. ‘Who is he going after?...Huh!'

'Naraku?...He did it again, that fool InuYasha rushing in by himself.’

“That stubborn, foolish, idiot!” Kagome’s body rigid with anger, as she digs her feet into the ground below.

“Come on you guys. Stupid InuYasha’s done it again.”

Just then Inuyasha makes another dramatic entrance. Bounding in over the forest’ full canopy.

“Stupid InuYasha huh!? Kagome when ya gonna learn to just keep yer big mouth shut!? The groups taken aback, when they see InuYasha’s haul. A collective gasp, falls from Miroku, Kagome and Shippo, and like a three part harmony…they exclaim.

“Jakken!?”

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Any comments are welcome, good or bad. Feel free to let me know. Thanks

Yes she likes to dance and drink all night...



Happy weekend!!!

Oh shoot. Sango thinks Miroku raped her. And what's Jaken doing with the shards? Did he take them?

Hmm.. Yes Sango's got issues. She could use someone to talk to right about now.

Jakken well, by any means... He's just doin what he was told.

I appreciate that you read it. Thank you.

Chapter 3 is nearly done. May wait a while tho to focus on contest. Still feel free to critique, Lemme know what i do wrong? Thanks for reading. :neko:

Sorry I didn't reply sooner. ^^;; I was about ready to send you my last PM, but my computer crashed on me. Again. ><

Anyways, I'm glad some other people helped you out. ^^ And it looks like the story is definately coming along. One thing still, is that you're still mispelling some of the main character's names and objects names. Like Sesshomaru, you added an extra 'u' in there, and then his sword, Tenseiga is kind of spelled weird... ^^;; and the last thing, the 'Y' in InuYasha should be capitolized. ^^;;

Um...that's it. ^^

Please keep up the good work with the story!

~Kari

Thanks for the reply Kari. Yeah i thought i researched the the swords and names enuf. Found several different spellings. Is there a "u" in tetsieuga or is it tetsiega? These I have found the most varied spellings. I spelled Sesshomaru right at first. Then I read a ficcy about him, it convinced me my spelliing was wrong. So I changed...DOH!

InuYasha's "Y" is just laziness. my apologizes. I may go thru and edit. When time allows.

but you like the story so far eh? Lemme know where it needs help.

Thanks again I'll update in a few weeks.

workin on my contest ficcy right now, so it may be a couple weeks till a new update. Half-way thru it now, on a good roll right now. so ill just go with it.

still feel free to reply. Let me know what yall think...


thanx

Actually, if you paid attention to the original Japanese language, there is an accent on the 'o' in VIZ's "Sesshomaru", making it have the 'ou' since not all computer's allow an accent. It's the same as for Shippou and in Kikyou. Both have accents on the 'o's. (If I did the accent over the o, there would be no u at the end)

Tessaiga is the correct way to spell InuYasha's sword. VIZ tends to get translations wrong 100% of the time, making the sword's name "Tetsusaiga".

Tenseiga is how you'd spell Sesshoumaru's sword.


InuYasha can be spelled several ways.

InuYasha, Inuyasha (I hate this way), Inu-Yasha (one of the more correct ways) and Inu Yasha (space between the Inu and the Yasha). I personally favor the first one since the more correct way looks weird to me when I write my fiction out on WordPad.

Sango
Miroku
Kirara (there is no "L" in the Japanese language, the "R" makes the "L" sound)
Myouga (again, an accent)
Naraku
Kagura
Kanna
Kohaku
Kaede

All the names I can think of at the time.

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Hey thank you for the heads up. I certainly want it to be as authentic as possible. I can see how the many translations can get crossed. I wrote down all your corrections for an easy refrence. One last question about the sword. do you recomend the "tessaiga' or the "tetsiega"? what is the reading comunity used to seeing?

thanks again...

I would recomend the 'Tessaiga' because obviously, you cannot spell VIZ's poor translation.

LOL... yeah, I find myself continually lost in translation.

My advice would to keep the fiction, or any story for that matter, authentic. VIZ is a company that has poor translators and poor media -- they butchered the DN Anime with their terrible voice actors.

do you recomend a site, or somewhere that has all the proper translations? Authenticity is something I want to have in all my stories. So again, thanks for the heads up.

You mean you dont think Richard Cox did a good with his V/O work? (BIG wink) :cutelaugh:

He does fine with his work, however, I don't like English voice actors. I would much rather listen to Japanese seiyû...

Richard uses the same voice for Ranma 1/2 in the later seasons =.=

Your best bet is to look on Google for some sites. I usually use Wikipedia.org for things, but that site no longer provides other names for the characters -- only Romanised ones.

That's why I hate Viz so much! They always chose the worst voice actors for the best characters. Hell, the majority of English voice actors have very little to no skill at acting whatsoever.

Why couldn't it have been Geneon to choose the voice actors? The voice actors for the majority of anime they do are at least half decent (although HNNKN was butchered) and that this company is way more serious.

Bah, I hate Richard Cox. Don't ask why.

Anyways; I think this is a wonderful story. I would critque it but everyone else has said enough.

as much as I love the series, there is not alot to be said for the acting. However...all that bad dialouge makes it alot easier to write out the characters when there speaking. usually the american translation loses something. I'll find myself watching episodes in japanese, I know the storyline so try to figure it out .

P.S. would you happen to know the japanese translation of "silver assassin" or "white"???

Oh and thanks for the kind words

Giniro is Japanese for 'silver'.
However, I do not know what 'assassin' is in Japanese.

yeah I was able to find the colors but no luck with assassin. Probably one those phrasing things. Cant just write "silver assassin"(if it were jpnse) all the particular na, ko, ku and such. like "Giniro na assaginka(made that up) ahh more research I guess

I found out the word for assassin:

Ansatsusha.

kuel...now to put them together, do you think "giniro ansatsusha"? or flip it. Maybe an adjective in the middle? hmmm?

thank you

Geneon crashed. It's either in a dormant state or is no longer in service.

I never knew they did. No wonder nothing of theirs has been released in ages.