Hello all! This is my first fanfic, bear with me ! <_<

Now, this story isn't the type where Inuyasha, Kagome, and the gang go to school together. In my story, Inuyasha gets trapped in modern- day Japan. Believing Inuyasha needs an education as a hanyou, Kagome's grandpa sends him off to an island dedicated to raising hanyous. HENCE, 'Hanyou High'.

If you know a story like mine, I did not copy off of it. I swear.

Now, if nobody has anything to say, I will start in the next post.

Okay. I'll start.
Disclaimer: I don't own any Inuyasha characters. [Duh.]

Chapter 1: Stuck in the well

"Dammit."

A barely audiable growl resonated in the gloom. Crouching at the bottom of the dank place was a creature. Or was it human? It would have been hard to tell outside of well it was trapped in; it was even harder now in the darkness.

"Kagome?" The beast asked in the same gravelly voice. "Are you still here?"

A piercing voice that was irritably high rang shrilly in the confined space of the well. "Yes, Inuyasha. I'm still here."

Although in truth, she had turned her back to him moments before, only to come dashing back when she realized he remained in her time.

"Is there anything wrong, Inuyasha?"

"Wrong, Kagome? No, absolutely nothing. I JUST CAN'T GET BACK IN TIME, TO MY TIME, WHERE I BELONG!"

"No need to shout, Inuyasha." the female named Kagome reminded. "We're almost face-to-face, and besides, keep that up and the whole of Tokyo will know that in their safe little neighborhood, there is a hanyou from 500 years ago on the loose!"

The creature snarled at the practicality of the human. Females of this race were famed for their 'sense and sensibility'. Knowing that he could not argue with her reasoning, he retorted, "Why don't you want to come back with me anyway?"

Kagome laughed nervously. Ignoring the question, she suggested a bit too brightly,"Inuyasha, why don't you get out of there and have some ramen noodles at my house?"

Inuyasha lept to his feet. In a voice that denied his excitement, he growled, "Sure, sure, I'm coming."

He exited the well in one magnificent leap, landing softly next to Kagome on the stone brim. In the early afternoon light, one could finally see him fully.

Large amber eyes and a slightly upturned nose were the most distinguising features of his face. Pale skin contrasted with the silver hair that cascaded down past his shoulders, the ends cut raggedly, as if each stroke of the scissors were hurried. The sloppiness of his hair did not make him look any less beautiful however. If possible, it only added to his style and seemingly effortless elegance.

He would be unnatural already. Yet he was wearing a red gi, like one a child would wear to his or her karate class. There was a lean sword at his waist. And, most odd of all, there were two dog-like ears sticking up at the top of his divine head. This man would certainly not be welcome in downtown Tokyo.

The girl, who couldn't be more than fifteen, had hair in the same style as Inuyasha, except it was black as a raven's smooth wing. And without the ears, of course. She had beautiful chocolate eyes that took up most of the space on her delicate face. She was also uncommonly pretty, but in a different way than he.

The girl, noticing her friend was staring into space, said gently, "Come on Inuyasha. Let's go."

She helped him up, and they silently walked toward the Hirgurashi's house. Anyone who saw them would naturally assume they were a couple. Inuyasha thought so to, although he had a weird way of showing it. But Kagome . . . well, she had other ideas.


So, did you like it? Review it please! Tell me how I can improve!

Its not bad for a first. Im new here also, did some extra reading before I wrote my first fic. Seems to be alot of high school related stories. (maybe all that some have to draw upon for ideas.) It seems as though original ideas get read the most. Still managing to keep within the context of the original story. Still its pretty good for your first. Mis-spelled a couple of things, and punctuation was decent. You should write in a word program or what ever you have. It corrects all the mess-ups for you. Anyway keep up the good work. dont get discouraged if someone doesn't like it.



P.S. my ficcy is called "chance at redemption" please give it a look. I welcome your advice, or crtique. thanks...

All righty! [I misspelled things!? I have to be mortified! :faint: ]

Im sorry if that came off insulting. not my intent at all. In fact I was called for the same stuff on mine. Im still learning too. I did say I liked it. (big smile)

cant wait for an update... :cheer:

-sigh- No one except iRNrevrSS replied. -is sad-

You know I re-read this and I really like your writing. Your very discriptive, and I like the story.

Please do update!!!

IJ seems quiet this past couple of weeks... maybe there all writing? Its a good story, It'll get read. keep writing :excited:

That's actually pretty decent. Please take that as an insane compliment. Because I only have 1 thing to say you should try to avoid. Which is a record low for me if you look at some of the older stories that I've reviewed.

The idea. I'm not saying it's BAD, but the high school fic idea has been run dry since about 2005.

Although, yours is a definite twist, which I really like.

I think that you're probably the first person I've reviewed to WITHOUT a wall of text on how to fix your story. Congradaulations.