IM THOUGH WITH THIS!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

This is to HELP you!

1)Make your chapters longer.
2)Try to change the color of your typing.
3)If you dont think it is spelled right then put this after the word(sp)COLOR][SIZE]








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than that it is ok :shikamaru:

Wow. This story needs way more work. And remember, I'M TRYING TO HELP YOU. I'M NOT TRYING TO BE MEAN.

1. You need paragraphs. Paragraphs have 5-10 sentences each, and that's how it works. And make sure each paragraph stays on one subject. Indenting doesn't work with forums, so you'll have to use enter a couple times

2. Use proper grammer. Spell correctly, use periods and commas, and capitols. Just don't fill each sentence with commas.

3. Detail. Don't just use simple sentences like "He walked over to a rock." Use something like "He noticed the rock with the sybol and quickly jogged over to it." Or whatever... I'm not much of a writer myself.

4. It needs to be longer. To get an idea how long, read other stories on here. But it's usually at least 10 times longer than that.

5. Just to be safe, put a disclaimer before each chapter.

Thank you.


@ Shezu_803, why do you have to change the colour?

....I have Ali help <3.

OKAY

1. Write it on Microsoft word.
2. MUCH longer chapters.
3. Paragraphs. (They should have 7-9 scentences.)
4. Watch all of the punctuation, Capitals and spelling.

Then it'll be much better. Great plot though <3

RAWR. YOU ALL BEAT ME TO IT. But you still need my wall of text anyways because I'm just KNOWN for it. But I'm still trying to be as nice as I can.

What program do you use? Either you're using wordpad/notepad/typing it straight to here. If you need a word program with page examples and spell check get Open Office. (I believe the URL is http://www.openoffice.org) It will help you spell better and will tell you when you have sentace fragments. And it's free!

Your paragraph structure is far from the greatest. After every punctuation mark (. , : etc.) you put a space after it.

Your general writing. When writing a story, please don't introduce the characters by saying "His name was Inuyasha." It's not original and sounds bland. Instead, maybe something like, "He had silver hair paired with golden eyes. He went by the name of Inuyasha. If it was his real name or not, nobody knew." See the difference? And I made that up on the spot. I want you to be able to get to that point in writing one day too.

Length. My common rule of thumb is on Microsoft Word/OpenOffice to be at least 2 pages long single spaced. Add or take a few paragraphs depending onthe dialouge length. Does your chapter look as long as it would in a normal book? If it isn't, then don't bother posting it until you feel it's long enough.

Proofread it. Get a friend, or an English teacher to proofread it. They'll know what's wrong and they'll be honest with you. The worst part for most people of proofreading it themselves, is they don't know what to change because they feel bad about it. It's also a good idea if you're like me where you want to change EVERYTHING. Then you'll know what TO change and what NOT to change.

Detail. Back to the original and bland sounding. "He thogt of himself as the greatest fighter in the galaxy." That sounds, boring and vague. There is millions of way to say that sentance. "Nobody could rival him. Afterall, he was Inuyasha! He was the greatest fighter on the face of the planet! Or more like the entire universe." Again, I made that up on the spot. But you see the difference.

But I will give you a tip on detail that in my last walls of text. Don't go overboard on the details. If you put too many, it will drag the story on forever and people will get bored. Put enough, but not too much. Again, get a proofreader, or as we call in fan fic writing, a BETA.

Somebody said something about a disclaimer, I personally don't write disclaimers because I use a format that says what fandom it's from. It's not nessicary to have a disclaimer, but it makes some people feel better. I don't understand why, if you owned the series, you wouldn't be writing FAN fiction for it. Disclaimers on stories are kind of like when you sing a song, you don't put a disclaimer before you sing do you? It's up to you basically. Although there will be people who will flame you for it, so be wise about it. (Also, it makes it all the better if you can think of creative ways to say disclaimers too.)

I can't say anything about the idea it's self because I have no idea what anime/manga/game Cell is from, but I'm assuming it will be good.

So do well and good luck! Ganbatte!