((I have this thing I wrote about ten minutes ago.
I wrote it whilst being pissed, and it helped me vent.
I'm not sure if I really like it, but I do? If that makes sense.))

We Made the World
We made the world
And filled it with hills and valleys
Plains and dents.
Our fingers would slip
And create a new shape
Or we would drop it and have to start over completely
But we would always smile and laugh.

Some people wouldn't bother taking
Such a long time for so many imperfections,
'Why not have everything flawless?'
Again, we'd smile and laugh and say;
'It's our faults that truly make everything worth while.'

...O.O'

Alyssa: It's amazing...

L: *starts talking about underlying metaphors and all the sh.it that I don't know about*

Truth: It's... Okay.

Lol. I love the concept... Not as good as the other, though.

BUT KEEP GOING. >3
Poetry's a battleground, see. You win some, you lose some.

I really like it allot. I understand you were pissed off at the time when you wrote this and it helped you to vent. It actually gave me a whole new perspective about the stuff I'm going through right now in my life. I've made plenty of mistakes and I have my faults. Your last line is really what had me but I loved it all.

[QUOTE] 'It's our faults that truly make everything worth while.'


:fan: :) :victory:

^_^ A cheery concept.

I like it! It's simple in the way it's written, yet the underlying concept is deep and makes you think. Great job! :victory: