this is my...3rd story

I do not own any Inuyasha characters

but I do own any characters I make up



Prolodge/Intro.

Hi. My name is Mezuki Oni. My last name means devil. My life was simple until one day Kagome Higarashi(sp?) ruined it. It was just another simple day like all the others. I was walking to Kagome's house to get help with my homework. When I saw her running to the shrine with her backpack I followed her. And that Is how it ALL started!


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okay...so I am going to put up the 1st chapter now. It is a little short and not very much detail and because of that I will put up the second chapter also...well some of the second chapter. I have not finished it yet.

I do not own any of the Inuyasha characters

I own any characters I make up


Chapter 1: The Begginning

Let's just say Kagome and I were never friends. The only reasin I would ever talk to her or go to her house was to do my homework. Kagome is, well, my tutor. I used to go there every other week for tutoring. Then all of a suden Kagome was always sick. That gave me no one to be tutored from.

The day I was going to ask my mom to help me, Kagome came bak to school. Almost everybody was asking to see if she was alright. Of course she was perfectly fine.

The day went by all fine until my mother got a letter from my father. My mother and father were never married. They just went out, boyfriend girlfriend type of thing. You know what I mean? When she was finished with the letter she started freaking out! She was mumbling and wouldn't talk to me. She set the letter on the table so I grabbed. I didn't read it but I grabbed it. I went upstairs into my room. I looked around then set the letter under my pillow. "I will look at it later" was my first thought. I layed down on the bed until I finally fell asleep.

I woke up today wondering about the letter. I didn't bother to look at. I knew I would just open it and read it after school. Then I remebered I had to go to Kagome's house if she was at school today. I was pretty sure today would be like any other day...The thing I didn't know, Is that going to Kagome's might just change my life forever.


Chapter 2: 5,000 years to the past

I was walking to Kagome's house to get help with my homework. When I saw her running towards the shrine with her backpack I decided to follow her. When I walked up to the last step I saw that the door was ajar. I peeked in, no harm in doing that right? I looked around everywhere I could see and I couldn't seem to spot Kagome. I opened the door and walked in. I made sure to close the door and be quiet. "Kagome," I whispered to where someone could have heard me. I listened to my echoeing footsteps until I came upon there family well. "I thought the well was suppose to be closed." I whispered wonderingly to myself. As I looked in I saw a sparkle. It looked like something from a collar or neclace. I slowly climbed my way down to pick up the thing. I started to grab it when when everything started to turn black, blue, and white. I looked all around me. I closed my eyes in fear of what was happening to me.

As I opened my eyes and looked up I saw a beautiful blue sky with few clouds. I knew there was no point in staying in the well. I looked on the ground and found my bag. I kept looking but could not find the thing that I had climbed in the well for. I started climbing out of the well when I herd a twig snap. I got out and looked around scared. I heard another twig crack and started looking around wildly. When I heard the third crack I yelled," Who's there?!" As I turned around I saw a tall and handsom man. I looked at his every detail. "What's that thing on his shoulder" I thought as he toook a step closer.

"Who are you?" The man asked in a calm voice.

I looked into the man's eyes and saw no emotion what so ever. "My name is Mezuki Oni." He said nothing only looking at me from head to toe. "May I ask who you are?"

Without any hesitation the man replied," My name is Sesshomaru."


Okay I is finished more of chapter two will be up later!!

I will be updating it later...I am having a brain fart...again...

PLEASE tell me if it is good or not!

okay. I am going to finish the second chapter. I will continue writing ...only because of my friend "Sam" and all the people who have read this! thank you...but PLEASE reply it would make me feel better!


okay! more of chapter 2.

(I am starting POV's)


((Mezuki's POV))

I looked down wondering what I should do. When I looked up he was staring behind me. I gasped. What was he looking at? I slowy turned around wondering what I was going to see. When I saw it...well him it was like nothing I have seen ever before. It or he was a dog type human thing...could that thing be...a...a hanyou? before any more thoughts went through my head I heard a voice ,"Inuyasha," It was Sesshomaru's calm voice.

I tuned back around when the man Inuyasha yelled ," Sesshomaru!"

I looked into Sesshomaru's eyes with fear. He looked at me then drew his sword. "Behind me!" he said with slight anger in his voice. I stumbled before getting behind him. I backed up a few steps so I wouldn't bump into him. I peeked out from behind him seeing Inuyasha holding a giant sword. I was slowy backing up. I was about to turn around when I saw Kagome come from the trees behind Inuyasha. My eyes widened. I couldn't move an inch. "Kagome," I heard myself whisper.


((Kagome's POV))


"Sesshomaru!" I yelled in an angry voice. What is he doing here? I knew spmething was bugging Inuyasha.

"Inuyasha, What is-" Miroku silenced himself. "Sesshomaru!" he yelled.

"Let me handle this!" Inuyasha yelled.


((Inuyasha's POV))


What is that other scent? I have smelled it before but it was on Kagome. I wonder who It could be. I gasped. Whoever it is. That person is right behind Sesshomaru. I looked at Kagome. I could see anger in her eyes. "INuyasha! Let me use wind-tunnel!"

I know that if Miroku see's he is about to suck in a woman he will stop. I smirked. "Go ahead."


((Sesshomaru's POV))


That fool! He thinks he will be able to suck me in. "Rin!" I yelled thinking. "Get out of here!"

"Yes me-lord!"

I slightly turned around to see Mezuki still standing there watching rin and jaken run. I quickly looked back to see miroku standing in front of Inuyasha and the others. I walked back to where I could feel Mezuki. I heard her gasp. I also had a smirk on my face. I turned my head and whipered ," Count to five after we start getting sucked into his hand then jump out in fromt of him."

"What! Why would I do that?" She replied while whipering.

" Don't worry you will be okay. If not we will both die."

She had fear in her eyes. She nodded. After five seconds of nothingness we started being suckked in.


((Mezuki's POV))


1.......2........3..........4........................."5!" I yelled while jumping in front of Sesshomaru. I closed my eyes in fear. Before I knew it I was falling on a man. I was in slight pain. I was shaking but was still able to get up. I turned around seeing Sesshomaru slowly getting up. I ran to ihm. "Are you alright?" I helped him while saying that.

"I'm fine," he replied calmy. I turned around. I looked at all of them but stopped when my eyes met with Kagome's.

"What are you doing here?" she asked confused.

"I should be the one asking that! This is where you go! You are never missing school! You're here blowing off all the work!" I paused.

"How did you get here?!" She asked once again but a different question.

I looked down. "I followed you. I saw something in the well so I climbed down to get it. When I got there...things started changing. When I got out of the well I was here." And that is how I met Sesshomaru...Not saying that alloud I looked behind seeing Sesshomaru on one knee. I gasped.

"You can't tell anyone about this!" She yelled. I looked at her slightly but then went back to Sesshomaru.

I neeled down in front of him. "Are you going to be okay?" I asked holding back the tears. I know I just met him but...I care for him. He probably doesn't even know it.

"I'm fine," he said.


((Sesshomaru's POV))



I looked into her eyes seeing so much sadness. I got ont both of my knee's. She stood up holding out her hand. When I took her hand I slowly got up with her help. I looked at Inuyasha. He looks surprised. I looked back at Mezuki who was looking down. I could see tears falling to the ground. I hesitated but put my hand on her chin and lifted her face up. I looked into her eyes as she looked into mine. The sadness was making me feel...sorry. What was this feeling? I grabbed her and took her into a hug. I picked her up like I did beforre and jumped to where I believed rin would be.



I might put three up...I hope you people liked it!

Okay I will post more of the story later! Thank you people for reading but if you would, please reply!!

I don't even know if people want to read it but if you do reply if you don't can you reply and tell me it sucks or something. I want to know if I should stop or not cause right now it seems pointless(to me) to write this story...I mean there is people reading it so that is why I continue to write.

I could not update because I was busy with people and other peoples people =]

I am reading it. And I would like to continue reading it. Please update soon.

thank you so much. I would update now but I have not finished the chapters yet I will update later today or tomorrow. Again! Thank you for the reply!!

You are very welcome =]

okay now for the next chapter!!

we go back to just mezuki's pov.

Chapter 3: Changes


As we landed on the ground I saw rin. She was leaning on a tree. "Rin?" I asked quietly to myself. I wonder what happened. I stood there not knowing what to do or say. All I did was looked at Sesshomaru. "Is rin...okay?" I asked.

He just stood there. Before he replied he slowly walked over to Rin. "She is fine. She is either sleeping or unconcience(sp?)." He picked her up. "Jaken!?" he yelled. There was np reply. "Jaken!!?" he yelled even louder. There was still no reply.

I stood there not knowing what to do. Just like I always did.





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My dad is kicking me off the computer cuz my friend came over! If I don't get off I be grounded... I will post the rest up later! I promise!!!!

I'm reading it, too. Keep writing!

I am soooooooooooooooooooooo soooooooooooooooooooo sorry!!!!!!

The internet got shut down...I can't update now but I will later...I have a baby sitter type person over...(my parents don't trust me) and she hates it when I am on here. I just have to wait till she is gone and then I will post the next 2 or 3 chapters.

Great! ^_^

I skimmed through it a bit, and I would like to say a few things.

Oni does not mean "devil" exactly, although, it can mean "devil"; it'll just sound weird. The term "oni" could refer to a type of devil or demon, due to the fact that in Nihon, "oni" are much like the Western monsters, but a proper way to say "devil" in Nihongo is "akuma", which can mean the following:

Devil
Demon
Devilish

All depending on how you use the sentence. Like, for the first one, you could say: "Akuma no Chi", which is a romanised way to say "The Demon Chi". The "no" in Nihongo, roughly means "of" or depending on the title, "the" or "'s". In this case, Chi (me) is a demon.

See, a free lesson? xD

Other than that, I suggest that you add a bit more description to your story. For example:

Hi. My name is Mezuki Oni. My last name means devil. My life was simple until one day Kagome Higarashi(sp?) ruined it. It was just another simple day like all the others. I was walking to Kagome's house to get help with my homework. When I saw her running to the shrine with her backpack I followed her. And that Is how it ALL started!

If you wanted to stay true to the Japanese version, that could turn into:

"Konnichiwa! My name is something I am not proud of... Oni Mezuki... My last name, meaning "demon" to the locals. It causes a lot of problems for me and my simple, yet hard life. That is, until one day, a stupid... foolish girl ruined it...

Hi-gu-ra-shi...

HIGURASHI

Ka-go-me.

KAGOME

Higurashi Kagome... until she came into my life and just RU-IN-ED it.

It all started with just a little curiosity, too... The day she decided to ditch our school homework, grab her big yellow bag and head for the Well...

Now, seeing as though I am big on the Japanese and their culture, I highly suggest that you stay true to the Japanese-given names of the characters, starting with their last names first (if any), and then their first names.

InuYasha (Could be spelled as Inuyasha [VIZ], Inu-Yasha, InuYasha or Inu Yasha)
Higurashi Kagome
Miroku
Sango
Shippou
Kikyou
Kirara (Note that there are no L's in Japanese, but the "R" can make a "L" sound.)
Myouga
Naraku
Sesshoumaru
Jaken
Rin

Note that in the original language, Sesshoumaru, Shippou, Kikyou, Myouga and a few others have an accented "o" on their names, making it so that it's pronounced like SES SHO MA RUU or KI KI YOO instead of the shortened way that VIZ does it.

For things like "Me-lord", you might want to say either "milord", "m'lord", or "Sesshoumaru-sama".

Remember: Capitalisation, Spaces and Enter! They're your friends. Spell Check, too. ^__^

As a Critic, I say: It needs a little work and editing.
As a Reader, I say: It's good, but could be better.
As a fellow Author, I say: Improve, and listen to suggestions.

What I said was merely advice and ways to spell the names. It shouldn't be taken as a threat nor a complaint. If you have any questions, feel free to contact me via PM. : D GJ, tho.

Ah, 'tis good advice, ichinichi.