sry i havn't writin in a while but i have a new poem hope you likey!

it's call" All that i've been givin’

All that i've been givin' is the pain that i've been livin
Try to make it my way and got sent on up the highway
What have I done wrong?
What is there to gain, but suffering and pain
All that I’ve come to, everythin’ I’ve been through
what is to say and only one way

All that I’ve been givin’!

what do u think, good, bad, better than i am or why? tell me!

that....is.....awesome!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! :excited:

you are really good at writing poems, you know that!!! :victory:

i wish i had that type of skill, but yeah, all my poems comes out like "blah" but yours, are awesome!!! :hug:

THANK YOU! ur too sweet! :hug: anyway my next poem will probley be ether tomorrow or friday because i start school tomorrow! :cryriver: if i have time i'll create another poem tonight or tomorrow and post it ether tomorrow or friday hope you like the next one

LATERDAYZ!

hey thats a good poem but were u sad when u wrote this? or did u write it jus cuz it came up in your head?

actually i was kinda sad but not really, i heard a song that day and the words i used but i changed them and i really liked what i wrote so i wanted to ask all the people who like my poems to read and tell me what they think, and sesshieismine likes it and so do you! :excited:

ok i wuz jus wonderin :excited:

woah thats an awesome poem!!! heres one of mine... it was based on a dream i had-

Walking on the beach with me, holding my hand.
We were just talking, laughing, just having a blast.
You looked me in the eye, and said those three words.
Those three words I would never forget.

Those three words – “I love you.”

I stood there gaping, not believing my ears.
Couldn’t believe it happened. To me, of all people.
Then you smiled at me. That perfect smile that melted my heart.
Pulled me close. Put your arms around me, kept me warm.

Those three words- “I love you”

And in a blink of an eye, you were gone
Everything else was too.
And it was just me. Alone.
Falling through the endless darkness.

And I thought of those three words-“I love you”

I blinked again, and you were next to me.
The music was going and the dance floor was full.
You smiled at me. Another perfect smile that melted my heart.
Held out your hand. Asked me to dance.

In a dream, in a trance, I nodded my head.
You gently led me onto the floor and put
You arms around me again.

I leaned against you. Taking in you scent.
Closed my eyes. Held you tight.
You rested your chin on my head.
Started swaying to the music.

For those few minutes, I was in heaven.
Everything faded away. Nothing mattered.
It was just you, me, and the music.
Then you leaned toward me. Closer. Closer.

And all that was in my head were those 3 words- “I love you.”

I snapped awake. I was in my bed.
In my room. Suddenly, everything sank in.
It was a dream. None of it was real.
But in my mind, as I drifted back to sleep, were those three words.

Those 3 words-“I love you.”


i was bored when i wrote this... lol

sry 4 posting twice but does anyone here write quizilla story quizzes?

dude ur poem was long!
hey...iz it based on THAT dream?
lol



~*Sasuke*~

Wind

Cultivate your hunger before you idealize.
Motivate your anger to make them all realize.
Climbing the mountain, never coming down.
Break into the contents, never falling down.

My knee is still shaking, like I was twelve,
Sneaking out of the classroom, by the back door.
A man railed at me twice though, but I didn't care.
Waiting is wasting for people like me.

Don't try to live so wise.
Don't cry 'cause you're so right.
Don't dry with fakes or fears,
'Cause you will hate yourself in the end.

(Repeats)

You say, "Dreams are dreams.
"I ain't gonna play the fool anymore."
You say, "'Cause I still got my soul."

Take your time, baby, your blood needs slowing down.
Breach your soul to reach yourself before you gloom.
Reflection of fear makes shadows of nothing, shadows of nothing.

You still are blind, if you see a winding road,
'Cause there's always a straight way to the point you see.

Don't try to live so wise.
Don't cry 'cause you're so right.
Don't dry with fakes or fears,
'Cause you will hate yourself in the end.

(Repeats)


sry...i just felt like posting lyrics 2 the song Wind from Naruto... :hehe:



~*Sasuke*~

i wish i had writing talent....or any poetic talent, but my mind isn't that creative except for a few things that i would rather not say, but nevermind that, the lyrics are cool, and i like your guy's poems! :excited: :hug: :hug: :hug: :hug:

aww thx.... :hug:

anyways zeke yes it was based on THAT dream....

Long long is the road oncoming road
Something is hurting and I feel i can't walk on
Standing on tiptoe looking for something everyday but, someday surely
The everchanging sky I look at will be a source of strength
Still there is joy, still there is sadness, and i don't when to expect
either
Still I must carry on, i know
Alone I cry till the dawn comes(1)
With a bit of determination, I continue to walk on
Though my heart is thumping and the snow dances about the road, spring will bring the flower once more
Returning to a painful day here, but i'm ok
Searching to meet a truly kind person
Sadly, Sadly my heart will break during the night
But still i'll believe in what i'm looking for
With my fragile hopes'
My wishes will come true, my wishes come true, even though tears may fall, its ok
Though rain is falling, violently falling
All of it is seeping into the ground
Though going on is painful, that same sadness is wonderful
passing by today, passing by here
To see your smile again
Still there is joy, Still I will hold on to those hands

Fruit Basket lyrics... its pretty kool

lol.


~*Sasuke*~

ME HAVE ANOTHER POEM WHAT CHO THINK?

it's called: it's over

I can't talk it anymore
someones closed my open door
and now i've lost my answer
the light is getting dimmer
i feel like i'm not the winner
i'm just a sad begenner
trying not to fall
i picked my last clover and now
i can't believe it's over

IT'S OVER!

i have another one too hop you like this one it's kinda the same

it's called: Over it

How could you know that behind my eyes a sad girl cries
how could you know that i hurt so much inside
how could you know that i'm not the avrage girl
that i'm carring the weight of the world yeah!
so can you get me out of here
if i lighten up a little bit then i will be over it

iam OVER IT!

heh heh hope you like um.. :hehe:

i like them both!!!!! there really good, and like i have said alot here, i wish i had your kind of poetic talent ^_^ , keep up the awesome job!! :excited:

awesome! :excited:


2 Sesshy_stalker : it burns!!!! *ahem* Kagome.......



~*Sasuke-Kun*~

woah female Youkai Inuyasha it is AMAZING!!!!!!!! and u said u didnt have any writing talent.....

aww :hehe: well i guess i have some talent :hehe:

YAY i have another poem

It's Called: It's not so bad

I sit here wonderin' why i feel so all alone
Waitin' by phone for someone to call
Sometimes i just want to kill myself but that reminds me

That's it's so bad, it's not so bad

Sometime i think about life
and how much pain there is
but then i think that someone's life is worse that mine,
but still same way why, just wantin' to die but that's reminds me

That it's not so bad, it's so bad

and i want thank you you for being the best friend
but why so sit wonderin' i feel so all alone but that reminds me,

That it's not so bad, it's sop bad

IT'S NOT SO BAD!

what chew think? if it's good that's great :music:

wow... amazing... im speechles...