You can find me under the light of the moon
My eyes as dark as the darkest lagoon
I spot my prey my fair feast
I don't care for her at the least
And as i bite into the vein
I realize i never want to be here again
Though time is ticking and i must feed
The heart's pulse is beating a melody
The memories flow through me
Yet they do not belong to me
The victim's hoarse cry is deafening
The sky, the fire, the rain sing
And all the harmony passes me by
Even all the beasts cry
Everything goes up in flame
I tried not to endure again
And all the forests, the darkness, the light
All shed tears as my prey slowly dies
Shame is the heaviest weight on my shoulders
All this strength is making me bolder
Though sometimes it isn't proper to be bold
Everlasting, similar to gold
As i lick the remaining blood my job is done
And not even the forces within the firey sun
Can stop me now because my demon side
Is taking control more so the ocean to the tide
So i continue this life and this horrible sin
Dreaming wishing of what i could have been

So what did you think? Anyone up for critisizing my work?

It is fine......READ MY STORY!

which one :sweatrun:

Woof,Bow-Wow,Arf,and Curses Cause Change if you do not mind..........

It's edgy, whatever that means, but I liked it, very good. :yesyes:

its based on a book so alot of people may not get it :sweatrun:

Which bok?

In the Forests Of The Night by Amielia awatar rhodes

Awsome I think look at my poems please because you are so good.

ill look at your poems....but really im not accually that great.