Revenge

The cold greeting of darkness welcomed me in a tight embrace sealing its darkness and determination within me. I would require that encouragement to save myself from the demons lingering inches away, hidden within the shadowy night. This midnight, this beauty, it could all be so dangerous. Yet, even so, danger is a craving everyone must fulfill, for the satisfaction of victory in the end. A job well done and a pat on the back from lonliness.

Silvery stars lurk in the sky, hanging on the raven layer for safety as the rest of the black space engulfs them. Though even while being attacked by this devil like spirit they always remain in a strong, bright form, shining down only for the plesure of us to gaze. The moon full and white guards over the beautiful earth as it is the sun's job to protect the heavens. This moon, earth's moon, it borrows the light from the sun thus watching over us. That leaves the sun to look over space including the moon. If there was no sun the moon would be unable to sheild us from eternal darkness. But only for the night.

Even though the night is cold I am invincible to its countless attemps to chill my bones, a warm protection of rage burns inside me, heating my body. When the two, cold versus hot are at a rumble it is almost questionable as to why someone would seek an obvious answer as to who the victor will be from another person. If anyone on this planet were to ponder that thought they would be burned at the stake for being so utterly stupid.

I am taking another midnight walk. This routine I experience a numerous ammount of times and have more yet to come in the future. However, this night is different. Tonight I am on a mission. Tonight I will end it all.


I have been watching him ever since that night. Ever since the day he made me cry a million tears, the day he shattered my heart into a billion peices. I loved him and falsely hoping he loved me back was a wish that was not granted. Another player was he, a simple player that I had fallen for. I wish someone would have told me this was the price of falling in love.

It happened so long ago though I remembered everything so clearly...
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tell what you think and i may continue

Very good................. :cheer:

Yay!!! :cheer:

That was freakin brillant! I never hear a story so well written! Please continue this, it sounds really good!

Wow thanks! I didnt think it was that good but okay ill take the credit! i might update soon!

Updation!


On my way, i stop by a nearby river to aid my aching throat. I observe my reflection in the flowing liquid. My waist length hair is wrapped around me, its raven tresses dipping into the water as I cup my hands for a drink. My eyes are deep and resemble a lost being, helplessly hurt and broken, all within their soil colored depths.

My clothing consists of preistess cloths, red as the firey sun and white as the snow within the cold air.I occasionally tie my hair back with a cloth but for the rest of the time i prefer to let ebony flow freely.

I rise from the cold water and my Shinidamachuu follow. I have no use for them tonight because they wont be able to help me with the task i must complete. I resort to a barrier striving to let only you in.

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Sry i know its short but i thought i had longer

ill update after some reviews

I really like this! OMG,it is brilliant. The language ecpecially. My grade 7 english teacher would be proud.

Nice and creepy an cool...

kaitlyn- Thanks a bunch! My grade eight teacher read some of my writing and said i should enter a contest. The funny thing though was that i had taken a gory story with a little bit of romance, suicidal intentions, horror, passion, fantasy, happiness all in one story...she read it to the class but she stopped and said "We better stop reading now the bell is going to ring soon." Thing is she stopped right before a torture scene :cutelaugh: but this one probably wont have any torture in it...

Soko_Monieono1234- Thanks! I really appreciate these replies and reviews!


I have to update my fanfiction.net stories and then i will update this. If anyone wants my fanfiction address i'd be happy to give you it but it is mostly beyblade yaoi. Half the people here dont watch beyblade and only the rare few read yaoi. Yet I do feel it is about the way things are written and not what they are about but ill just tell you know that this story Revenge isnt yaoi based.

ist not verry good brit....i can wrote wayyy better! mabe we showld have writer contest so i can proove i am better then this crapp you write!!! :cutelaugh: it really does suk!

Wow.....Spazzing AND bad spelling. I am impressed. :bgiggle:

jessica thats a good idea....maybe we should have a contest...

It's pretty good, update

thankz! Im just going to make a few posts on other topics and then ill update

RRRGH!!!! Okay i just typed out ten paragraphs to this and then the page closed itslef. Then I posted 3 paragraphs on a new one and explained that i was angry because the first one closed itself and then I lost that one too! So angry! So let me start again!


Yes if you havent guessed yet this is a Kikyo fanfic. I also understand that by simply stating that I will lose some of my readers but my quote is....Its not what the person is writing about, it's how good they are writing it. Now let me try and type this the third time!


Updation!

I perch myself in a nearby oak praying that my assumptions were correct and that he would be the one entering this barrier. As I await my Shinidamachuu I also patiently wait for the visitor I am eager to see arive.

My Shinidamachuu finally return to me after a short period of time. They bear the souls of young women who are strung to the remnaints of the earth tragically. I only wish to call upon souls full of aching melancholy. Without these spiritual life lights I wouldn't be able to roam with the small ammount of my own soul that is within me.

Suddenly after seconds, minutes and hours, several of them strung together dripping with the sound of my steady breathing, I feel something enter my barrier. Though it's demonic aura is insignifigant I do recognize it yet I cannot pinpoint the person to whom it belongs. All i do know is that it is not the being I wished to encounter, it is not the one I prayed to speak with.

They start to approach me, slowly and steadily. Through the thick fog that has suddenly appeared I see no more than a shadow, a hollow imitation of something I cannot see. However, this demon is strong and I know that much because my barriers are not weak.

"What ails you so?" I cautiosly question my vulnerable opponent while jumping down from my seated location. I do not wish to endure or encounter another fight today, yet it is my job to protect. It is my assigned duty to defend.

"How are my problems any of your concern?"He laughs and suddenly it all comes to me. Suddenly I know who this demon is.

"Naraku, you bastard." I breathe.

"Very good Kikyo. Even in hiding my demonic aura you can still identify me. You learn well." He pushes away ebony locks and i can finally see the demonic eyes his tresses were pursuing in hiding. These eyes reveal that I was indeed correct. He was no mortal.

"Naraku why do you challenge my knowledge? If you were intelligent at all you would kindly leave."

"I see you do not wish to fight. It's a good thing I didnt come here for that. I believe you have a jewel shard."

The next action happened so quickly I hardly knew what was going on. I didn't know what he was talking about, I didn't have a jewel shard. I opened my mouth to tell him so and I feel a hand around my throat. Of course I struggle. He whispers a single word into my ear and my body goes limp. As my vision fades and my feeling disappears I realize Naraku has taken me. I have let the enemy win.




To be continued!!!!



Please review!

Wicked. And I have nothing against Kikyo...Please keep going.

:cutelaugh: :hilarious: u suk!

You asked me to give a review, and I shall. This was just a line that I couldn't help pointing out as cheesy and sounded overexaggerated. This fanfic is obviously told from Kikyou's point of view and I quite like it! Although it's very descriptive, you should remember that grammar and spelling still counts. If you want, I could always point out your grammar mistakes and help you fix them. Boy, aren't I a bother?

augi- Well to the cheesey and overexaggerated part I'm glad you were accually smart enough to point out one of my greatest flaws that i happened to leave in. The first part originally belonged to an entirely different fanfic. Half of the second part belonged to my book as did sections from the third peice. I figured it was too late to change it from my othe fanfic to this one so I just continued it into a Kikyo story.

Spelling and grammer? I meant to do that I swear! Well accually i'm quite angry at myself for not spellchecking it because my greatest pet peeve is people who dont use spellcheck. I get so annoyed with it that I even go to the point to spellchecking and retyping they're story when they act as if I have given them no advice. I must say I have been rushing this story. So from this day on I vow to not rush to the end of this and take as much time as humanly possible to spellcheck.

So to answer your question... you're no bother at all. I would greatly appreciate it if you were to point out mistakes and even more grateful if you found any mistakes in the paragraphs I just wrote replying to you because I am sure there are alot.


jessica A.k.a. i_am_kanna_and_i_love_nar
aku- First of all your name is hard to type. To many underscores. Anyhoo stop replying to this if all you are going to do is bash.

kaitlyn- Thanks again! I'll try to update soon....once i get more ideas :sweatrun:

Heh, my comp doesn't have spell check so whenever I have written work that I want to edit, I just print it out of my comp and read it on paper. It just seems simpler that way. Also, spell check doesn't always work the way you want it to. Anyway, at first when I started reading your fan fiction, I didn't really like that it was told from Kikyou's point of view. But as I read on, I started getting used to it and even liking it.

Congratulations for getting on my list of decent fan fics. Don't worry there's other fan fics that are on this list as well. I just haven't told you which of the authors on this forum were on it.

augi- Well first of all I must point out I feel greatly honoured to be on your list of decent fanfics. I know what you mean by the spellcheck not always working. I dont have it on my computer but i usually got to spellcheck.net however that doesnt help when there are grammer errors.
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I wont be updating tonight because it is 12:24, I dont have ideas and I am so close to falling asleep on the keyboard... I'll sleep and try to come up with more ideas. I have a basic idea of what will happen, I am just musing over how i can put it into words that will express everything the way I want it. You know the sort of thing where you want to make it seem that everyone feels all the moods that the character is feeling? I'm originally pretty good at that....i can write things that will make people hate, love, cry or laugh....when you get the words right you can control the story so it seems like you are right there in the room beside the characters. Anyhow I better go to bed. Gn Everyone! :thinkhw:

Honored. Do you truly mean that? It just amuses me how certain fan fictions can be read like a novel. The whole reason I don't like most fan fictions is because the way the author describes the character makes them not like themselves, you know what I mean? At times, it's just difficult to write about the character the way you want to.

It's just that I sometimes have trouble writing something that's perfectly clear in my mind but can't even be described with my level of vocabulary. There are just times where you want to write something the way you want it, but you just can't since you don't know which words to use.

augi- Honored yes I do mean that. I used to be one of those people that made the characters seem as if they were a completely different person. I must say I am highly embarresed by my former and first stories. Frankly, I can't read them anymore.

Im glad you understand what I mean though. I usually hope that everyone reading understands what im saying and feeling while writing. I see that as the worst level of writer's block. Knowing what you want to say but not knowing how to put it into words.

Yes, I agree with that as well. There are also times where you don't know what to write at all. I get that more often than just not knowing how to put something into words.