me: today's an off day i can't think of anything deep to say, oh btw the villagers name is siyu

siyu: *sitting on mihoushi's shoulder with a string tied to his foot and with the other end around mihoushi's finger* why don't you let me go i have money
mihoushi: that's not good to me i need someone who knows the land, just be happy i didn't shove you in my pocket
siyu: *jumps a bit* ok fine i'll shut up. anyway where do we need to go
mihoushi:... where nonsurrent is....
siyu: why would i know that? Just because i live here doesn't mean i pay attention
mihoushi: *pulls him up to her face and taps him lightly on the head, and smiles a bit* you are joking right? you better be joking.
siyu:...............................
mihoushi: *flicks his forhead hard* YOU LITTLE TWIRP
siyu: OOOOUUUCH besides he would never tell anyone incase of rebelion..... do you think he wants to lose power?
mihoushi: that's just great well......?.... I geuss i should get a weapon do you know where i can find one?
siyu: *still angery* there is a story about a creature somewhere around here who is called, grouthnysint who has a waepon trapped inside of him
mihoushi: inside? that's kinda creepy
siyu: it is a sword that was used by the last person to raise against nonsurrent but he was not strong enough and died, his only power was in his sword so nonsurrent shoved it down the throat of one of his minions and gave him imortality
mihoushi: THAN HOW AM I SUPPOSED TO GET THIS SWORD *hits him on the head again*
siyu: OOUCH I'VE NEVER TRAVLED ANYFARTHER THAN THE BORDERS OF THE VILLAG HOW WHOULD I KNOW
mihoushi: this is gonna blow.......... WAIT A MINUTE you're lying that one armed freak told me about a guy called slogeth or something like that
siyu: slogeth has been dead for twenty five years

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Awesome!Keep going! :peace:

i'll read it later, i got to go get ready for church sooooo yeah, but i can tell this will be good...possibly alittle bit boring if you want some feedback, but i can't really tell since i havn't really read it :hehe: ............................................yet

I will keep going and sessho lover or are you sessho is mine now.... either way hurry I do want feed back

I think you should keep going!

i'mn stating to think the dialouge is getting worse

okay okay i read it! it was okay, but idk, i think it's getting alittle bit boring, like you need some action, or a hot guy in it at least :rolleyes: lol, jk, but you said you wanted feedback right?

I did. and the parts leading up to the action are always boring..... they encounter the dude in the next chapter to those who care

ok..now i understand more.this is excellent...

thank you.