Broken Angle
Chapter 1 the girl I love.

Haru Takuyasha is a 16 year old boy who lives with young orphans that are even younger then him. Haru has short white hair that is blue at the back and he has bright red eyes. He too is an orphan but he thought nothing big of it, he’s been an orphan since he was three years old and he taught himself how to talk and how to walk and do what everyone else does. It was all good for him until he was twelve years old, terrorism happened and he was cruelly separated from a young girl named Kaname Askara, who was his girlfriend at that time and she gave him a promise that she will come back. This flashback always bugged Haru but he didn’t think anything of it, he had this attitude to not get his hopes up since he was thirteen years old. One day as he was playing with orphaned children, a girl


showed up. She wore a blue school uniform, she looked really cute with her bright blue eye and her brown back length hair tied up in a pony tail. Haru recognized her as to being the girl he once knew four years ago. “K-Kaname, Is that you?” Haru replied and she nodded. He looked happy and embraced her. “H-Haru Takuyasha, is that you?” Haru nodded and they both smiled. The kids giggled and one of the young boys nudged against Kaname’s skirt. She looked at him and smiled. She said to Haru “we have not broken our promise to each other.” Cop sirens go off and police men surround the children. “Okay you brats, foster homes for you all.” One of the men replied. Haru came up to them and smirked. “And what if we run away from them again?” the cop put his gun at Haru’s forehead and said “then only you would go to juvenile hall.” Haru winked at the kids and in sign language telling them to run away. They all understood and then jumped over




individual fences and then the cops all shot Haru but he dodged, grabbed Kaname and ran off. Haru realized a few hours later the cops caught the children and they went to foster homes. The one female cop replied “Haru-Kun doesn’t realize that we are only helping him to have a nice home and yet he refuses.” One of the cops answered back “it’s because he hates to live in different homes and he’s had a bad history with foster parents.” Haru got Kaname to safety and she looked skeptic about the whole running away idea. “Haru, you realize that those people are trying to help you, yet you refuse. Why did you do this?” Haru looked at her and answered back “it’s because I always end up in the wrong foster home, I’m always being treated like a slave and being beaten. Ever since the day we were separated.” Kaname looked at him with sympathy then smiled, “you’re still pretty handsome for a guy who’s been through that sort of misery.” Haru blushed a little and turned away. “You’re still that same Haru I know.” Kaname held Haru’s hand and they walked away. Haru smiled a little as he walked beside Kaname.

I wrote this a long time ago! I've made it into a manga! ^_^ I'll scan the pictures of Haru and Kaname sometime later.

Greats story,Saku! Hope you update soon!! :rose:

I like this so far! ^_^ Update soon. Just capitallize the letters that are needed to be capitallized, and you missed some puncuation too. But, overall I like it!

Broken angel
Chapter 2: Tsukaska; the annoying assistant.

Haru looked around to see if cops were coming to either send him to juvenile or to kill him. He held Kaname’s hand and then started heading towards the outskirts of town. Kaname looked at Haru with an awkward look and then realized that she had to go home, Kaname hugged Haru and told him that she had to go, Haru understood and then allowed her to leave.

That night while Haru was in a bar, a small guy sat beside Haru who seemed to know him, Haru looked towards the small person, he didn’t seem to be any younger then Haru, in fact he looked like he was fifteen years old instead of 16. But this guy seemed to be in better shape then Haru was, except that his shoulder length hair was white and scruffy looking. “I’m Tsukaska Amuryua, and you?” Haru looked at Tsukaska and then replied with a sigh “my name is Haru Takuyasha.” Tsukaska gasped when he heard the name; of course Tsukaska would gasp because of the name. Haru was once a gang leader in the streets of Tokyo city who was almost executed for his violent ways if it weren’t for the cops to let him go on living as a poor boy. This maybe was four months ago but it didn’t stop Tsukaska from questioning him; Haru remained annoyed until Tsukaska brought up a different topic which was about working in a group that are like polices but instead of putting people to jail, they would question them and assassinate them later.

This interested Haru and he agreed to become a member of this group. “Well then Haru; you’re going to be one of the highest ranked assassins in the whole business.” Tsukaska said with sheer happiness, he took out a card and handed it to Haru. “That’s what will tell you were we are.”

The morning came and Haru looked for this place, he kept looking until he found a huge building which seemed to impress Haru a lot. He entered the building and saw a lot of people working like crazy, one short kid pushed Haru aside, this kid turned out to be Tsukaska. The same one he met the previous night before. Tsukaska looked back and then ran up to a bigger man who seemed to be his boss “Mr.Tates this is Haru Takuyasha; he’s going to help us with this business!” Mr.Tates rubbed his horse shoe like beard and then snickered “you’ve been lucky I’ve accepted you under age but do you expect me to accept another minor?” “But Mr.Tates this guy is skillful, he’s brave, he’s strong, healthy and many other things. That’s how you accepted me because I was all that. You can at least accept him.” Tsukaska snapped back at the bold man who after didn’t seem impressed at all afterwards. “Mr. Amuryua, I’ve accepted you because you were some kid on the street looking for a decent job!” Tsukaska stayed silent for a few moments and then shrugged. “But I will give him the job because you need a partner in crime.” Tsukaska grew happy and then embraced Haru “you got the job!” he yelled after letting Haru go. Haru wondered what job he had to do, if he was given any.

There was a party going on in the Askara household; people were chatting and many children played in the backyard with the animals there. The only one who wasn’t really partying was Mrs.Askara who was focused on getting everyone’s attention “in honor of my daughter’s birthday, she will come out and give you a speech of how thankful she is to have you all here.” Everyone paid attention and watched as a teenage girl came and then took the microphone from her mother, her beautiful blue sapphire colored dressed really did catch many people’s attention; Kaname then took a deep breath and said “thank you for coming to this party in honor of me. But really I’m not all that important I’m just another human being who happens to have extremely rich parents and a long lost love. Please let me tell you a little about him, he was an orphan who wondered around these streets of southern part of Tokyo, he was a very kind hearted gang leader who was always there for me at the hardest times I was depressed about something. I never got to know if he felt the same way I did when I started to fall in love with him, he wasn’t a high class snob like me but he for sure was a kind of guy a lot of girls would want. After the law took him in to a foster home I never saw him again until just yesterday, he was taking care of children who were orphaned as well until the children were taken away from him.” Mrs.Askara took the microphone away from Kaname and then told her to continue partying.

A few hours after Kaname’s speech a bunch of criminals came and then tried to rob the place until a boy came in and shot the criminals with a magnum 47. Kaname brightened up and yelled out the boy’s name being ‘Haru’ she ran up to him and embraced him. Haru blushed a little and then hugged her back. Kaname kept Haru close to him and then kissed him. Haru was shocked that Kaname would dare to kiss him for the first time in his whole life. He held on to her tightly and then said in a low soft tone “I will always try to be there for you no matter what.”

I think that the lover story you have running in part of this is cute but I am apt to say that the story is moving rather quick. Of course if you have turned this into a manga this is just fine but for a chapter book you would have needed more detail.

Awsome fic!!!!!!! I hope you put the pictures on soon, cause I can't wait to see em!

Hope you update soon! :angelstar7:

I will, once I remembered what I put in next! I wrote this a long time ago and I'm trying to remember it because I lost the darned scribbler I drew it in!

That must suck (to loose something like that)!

I hope you either remember what happens next or find the scribbler......(whatever that is.........I'm stupid. Go on say it, I'm really dumb...) :hehe:

A scribbler is a book you draw in and you're not dumb.

Right. I'll make a tab of that.

I might not be dumb, but I AM an idiot! I very proud to be one though. Dont ask. I'm weird.

Broken Angle
Chapter 3: family matters

Haru sat his gun down on his bed, why did he just kill another human being? He knew that Kaname wasn't the reason at all, in fact he killed those criminals for his own pleasure. If his mother was alive; what would she say? What would she think of him? Haru rammed his head against his pillow and tried to forget about what had juat happened. He wondered what his intention was besides saving Kaname and her family, it was probably because of his thrill he gets when he causes a bloodshed. The gun was all nice and polished and sitting on his bed looking all proud and resourceful. 'How could something this small kill another human being?' Haru thought to himself while picking up the gun and putting it in the weapon belt that he was given. His first day as an assassin and already he feels guilt.

How sad, an Assassin regretting his kill. Haru looked outside and saw how many people lived on the streets and how many were murdering for money. Was the real world like this? The room's temperature rose making Haru take his shirt off revealing his scar placed on his back, still in the shape of an X and still looks bloody even though it was there for only five years.

When he was eleven he got involved in a gang fight trying to save his younger brother, a man with a black hoodie on approached Haru with a knife and laid him flat down the ground, giving him the chance to slice his back.

Remembering that made Haru revengeful, he wanted to kill the man that scarred him for life. Kaname had never once seen his scar nor had she known about his scar. He had fear of showing his scar due to the fact that he was always treated like a forgenier by others.

As soon as that thought caught Haru's mind Kaname walked in. She had a bag in her hand as well as an umbrella. She came up to Haru and embraced him saying "well, well if it isn't you Haru." Haru made a slight blush, what did she want?