kagome's pov
i opened the door of the car. to my horror, i was stunned by a 5-storey house in fire... it was hojo's house.. i.. i'm shocked!! :0_0: i'm speechless.. but i saw hojo running towards the house so i stopped him..i held his arm.. "hojo!! nooo!! you're not getting in there are you!?!" "yes i am. don't worry, i'll be back!!" and he left... "noooo!!!" the police can't stop him... i followed him and put a barrier around
myself... yes, i'm a miko.. :blue20: but he doesn't know bout it.. "i'll help him!!" i explained to the police.."ok.. but hurry!!" i ran to the entrance door.. i saw him running upstairs.. i followed him and went on my way to the stairs but suddenly, a youkai appeared infront of me.. wait.. a youkai!?! :0_0: :0_0: what the!?

hey guys.. i'm new here.. please reply if u like it.. i'll continue.. hehe..thnx!! :mint40:

It's crap.

And type out your letters, foo'.

Oh c'mon! I think this is good! My first story sucked so even this is better X DDDD UPDATE SOON, PLEASE! ^_____^ oh and welcome to IJ! ^___^ :cactus25:

Agreed.

Damn bastards.

its a good idea and plot line, but you would want to put in capilization to show where a sentence ends and where they begin, and maybe you could add a little more description, but i like it!^.^

what demon_eyes said, other than that i like the idea :cactus25: So another life altering desicion fic...this outta be good. update when you can! :angelstar22:

Try capital letters, spaces, periods and whatever else you forgot

Then...I'll think about reading it

Please continue.

:cactus25: heii guys.. thnx 4 ur replies.. and i'll follow ur advices to me.. this is my next update..

Naraku's POV
I held my sword and prepared to attack her.. It destroyed her barrier but not enough to knock
her out.. She's quite defensive, huh?? :gaara01: Hehe.. But 2nd time won't fail..-_- :grrr:


Kagome's POV
"Who the hell are you!?! What are you doing here!?!?" :0_0: :scare: I asked this strange man.. No,,.. youkai.. He was in a black robe.. I, I can't see his face.. But I can see his hands.. They're... They're claws..!! :0_0: :scare: But when I lift my face, he held his sword again and he... I.. I can't see anything more..

there.. you think it's better??

Me want's more! ^____^

*gasp* ooooooooooooooooooooooooo
ooooohh!!! MORE!

great update! loved it! :angelstar7: this chapter was better. Its naraku! its ALWAYS him! how did he pass through the well? update when you can! :angelstar22:

I like it! My first story Secret Passion sucked! :blue20: But this is pretty good! Plz continue and welcome to IJ!!! :lemon14:

Good fucking lord.

Why the hell are you people giving this story good reviews when..

1) The plot line completly SUCKS.

2) There are too many smileys being used.

3) The spelling is horrid.

EH?! AWNSER ME THAT!

Meh. I agree! Story is not spelled 'storey' and also, WAY TOO MANY Smilies!

Try keyboard faces such as O.o or >.>

Or just have this told from play-format! It makes no sense in my brain...

Here's some advice:

1.) use MSW (and for all who don't know, MicroSoft Word)

2.) Find a Beta-reader (someone who checks all those little things we call mistakes, grammar, spelling, plot-fixes...and more! Oh and a beta-reader also tells you if it is a good story or not...)

(Note, I don't normally be mean-ish like this to others...)

if you are here to just be mean and not even give "CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM"

then you can just go and fuck a stick.

ichinichi here. gives 'CONSTRUCTIVE CRITICISM' Learn from ichinichi. You might actually learn something. ichinichi RULES!!! YA!

well.. ichinichi.. thanks for the advice and the "contructive criticms" you replied.. i'll take 'em and update soon.. and for nikoali.. why'd you even bother replying to my stupid story if you don't like it.. you're wasting your time.. but thanks for all the other replies.. hehe..

No problem! ^________^ I'm waiting for the update! :D

hey i researched about the spelling of 'storey'::

The various levels of rooms in a building are also called floors or stories (storeys in British English (singular: storey); in American English, the singular is story)

so im actually right.. i just used the british english of the word.. hehe.. i think i'll update on friday.. hehe.. don't worry..

Okey Dokey! ^^ I wait....is it friday allready?....what about now?...........nooow??.........NOW??.....Ahh damn...i'm not very good in waiting.. >XD

Why do you have to be such a basterd Nikoali? YOU COULD MAKE MOTHER THRESA CUSS YOU OUT! Oh, and Shippo_666, try to be a little nicer? Shes new here.:gaara01: Don't listen to him. He's a jerk who needs to restrain himself when addresing a lady! Hehehe, I sound like Yura of the Hair. Lol. Anyway, great job! :lemon14: NO!!! KAGOME! SAVE HER PLEASE!!!
Oh, and more about you Nikoali. QUIT BEING SO GOD DAM FUKING MEAN!!! Wow, I think that is the most cuss words I've ever put in one post. Lol. Update soon, plz!

hehe..thanks for the post inuyasha_gurl.. here is my next update:

Naraku's POV

Good. Now, you're outta here. You can't interrupt my plans, my dear. I picked an unconscious miko with some serious injuries and flew up high. Wow, must’ve really hit her hard. But she won’t die. Not on my hands. I passed the gates of the house and went to an area not so far away from the fire. I laid her down on the grass and hid behind the surrounding bushes as I saw her being picked up by the police. :gaara01: “This is the lady who said she’s gonna help!!!” an officer said. “Take her away and bring her to the nearest hospital!!” said the chief. I smirked. Pathetic humans. But I can’t stand here wasting my time about their stupid ways. I still got someone to take care of.

Hojo’s POV

Damn! She followed me!! :mad: Why does she have to be stubborn at this time!?! Well.. I can’t hear her voice anymore so she must’ve been blocked by the fire and falling debris. I’m on the 3rd floor now and my parents are still nowhere to be found. I checked the last room and left for the 4th floor. I am exhausted!! But gotta hurry because this thing’s gonna fall…

Naraku's POV

I found her boyfriend. What a fool… He was heaving and panting heavily while running upstairs. I swung my sword against him and he fell. “Ugh!! Shit!!” I kicked him in the butt hard and punched his face. :punch: “Take that you unfaithful stupid bastard!!” I continued kicking him.

O.o ookkk..... So naraku likes kagome? X DDDD ok ok..Update soon!

yeah.. they're in the present time in there.. the world is mixed with youkais and humans.. and also half-breeds.. :mint40: kagome is kinda rich there.. u know.. her mom is kinda a multimillionaire so her life is kinda wealthy..

So.. Naraku likes kagome, kagome's mom and kagome herself is very rich and the worlds are mixed? X DDDD

Hojo’s POV

Someone was attacking me and heard him say something. He was continously doing the assaults and I can’t see clearly. I feel blood dripping down my head and my arms and legs becoming... frail..I’m so weak. NOOO!! I have to save my parents! I tried my best to dodge him but.. I.. Nothing… :x_3:

Naraku’s POV

His dodging is futile. He finally passed out. :scar: “You are useless. I wish to kill you but I will still need you. Hahaha..” I carried his wounded body and left the house. I will make use of this asshole to get Kagome.

O____________o Narakus weird X DDDDDDD Update soon again!

gothicbitchylover this story is AWSUME!:) and dont worry, if those flippin retards come and inslut your story again, ill give them a piece of my dark side! YOU GOT THAT NIKAOLA[sp?] If you dont like it then leave, and go fuk your mom!D=<

oh yes UPDATE SOON!

HI, I like ur story, but.... Mabe some more chacters? And uhh, mabe I dontk= know, but continue. But I might not reply. SORRY! But whoever is writing the story (Sorry!)
ttyl
Lou
P.S Dont get mad at me plz,!!!

well..uhmm.. uh..thanks!! for the replies.. and you can call me sharlene.. my name 'gothicbitchylover_18' is so long for you.. :lemon14:

You have very pretty name ^____^

please update. your doing good.

what name?? sharlene?? really!?! :angelstar22: haha.. i think it's ugly.. thanks.. well.. im going to update soon.. haha.. hey, InuyashaIsMine, what can I call you??

some people call me ninja and some people call me ninni, yes ninni is a very difficult name to say if your not finnish XD or you can call me my real name; Ninjamarie, but i think it's too much >.<

hello.. this update is long..

~After 1 week~


Doctor’s POV

“Mrs. Higurashi, Kagome is fine. She is safe and her injuries are healed. We just have to wait for the young lady to wake up and she can go home, then she can enjoy the rest of her vacation outside in no time.” I informed Mrs. Higurashi, Kagome’s mother, who is worried-sick about her daughter. I saw her face lighten up a bit and flashed a relieving smile. “Oh thank goodness!! Thank you so much, Doctor Akataki, for taking care of my daughter. I am so happy.” She replied. “You’re welcome Mrs. Higurashi. You just have to settle the bills when Kagome wakes up.”

Mrs. Higurashi's POV

“Oh sure. We have enough money to settle the accounts. Thank you again.” I responded to the kind doctor. “Well, I still have some appointments and check-ups to take care of so may I leave you now? If you don’t need anything more??” “Oh nothing doc. You can go now. Thanks again.” I waved him goodbye. I am so happy that we’re going out of this place as soon as Kagome wakes up. I entered the wide, airconditoned room. It smelled so nice and very clean. And I saw a Kagome sitting in bed and watching cartoons with her little brother, Souta. “Kagome, you’re awake!!” :mint40: I said as I walked towards her bed.

Kagome’s POV

“Yeah, mom. And I heard your conversation with the doc. So I’m going home later?” I answered her with a question. “Yes, sweetheart. But they have to assure that you’re safe before going home so they will take some exams on you.” “Oh, I’m safe!! I don’t need those exams or tests!! I wanna go home!” I shouted happily. “Ok then, I’ll just have to arrange things in here and we can all get home.” She said. “Yay!” I’m so happy I’m going home. I’m gonna see Hojo today. :hellokitty08: “Oh and your friends are waiting for you. They’re gonna have a swimming.” “Really!?! Oh, can I go??” I said jumping with laughter. “Ok you can, young lady if you stop hopping and jumping on your bed.” She laughed and left. I am so happy I’m gonna see my gals!! I’m so excited!! :angelstar22: “Sis, I’ma go home. Just tell mom.” Souta said. Maybe he’s off for some date. Hehe. I just laid down and continued watching t.v. "Ok. Good luck with your date!" I said. "Shut up." And he left. :blue20:

Souta's POV

Stupid sis always sneaking into my room. :gaara01: I'll get her some time. When she gets better, I'm making her life like hell!! :hammer:

YEAA SOUTA IS BAD! X DDDDD Update soon again!

hi..=)

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