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Title: Dealbreaker
Description: How Kid Devil got back his humanity


mad-libbs - August 26, 2007 04:40 AM (GMT)
This isn't the best piece of fiction I've written. Hell if you want my honest opinion, it's one of my worst. But that's because I didn't use a lot of description or setup on this one. I figured you all knew the cast of players and therefore all that was left was the raw story. And that's what you get, raw story. I think I might have made Eddie and Rose a bit OOC (out of character) but it's been awhile since I actually wrote something like this. Bare with me. This is just the story of how Eddie got away from Neron's clutches. I felt it needed to be told what with ADAC happening and all. Eddie, by all accounts shouldn't have lasted that long because Neron would have come to take his soul by then. That's where this story comes in. Hope it's not too confusing or unbearable. :thatguy:

As a side note, you may what to have this playing in the background when you read this.

Things happen that we cannot change. Things happen that is out of our control. I was about to lose the man I loved because he made a deal with a demon and couldn’t keep his part of the bargain. On his twenty-first birthday, Neron was supposed to take him away forever. But I struck a deal of my own. I had found something with Eddie; he made me feel like I was finally at peace. He helped me cut through the fog of my mind and I wasn’t sure if I could do it without him. The idea came to me a week before his birthday, when the fear of losing what I had found culminated into what I thought would be our last night together.

I had been putting off his advances for a long time, I don’t remember exactly why. I loved his attentions, and the way he would persist even after I would playfully call him a freak and walk away, but one day I took a chance, hoping to make up for all the lost time. Two months before, I found out that his birthday was the day Neron would come to claim his soul, and that night a feeling of overwhelming dread hit me full force. I knew his time was growing short, but I hadn’t realized just how little we had left. I found him on the roof of the Titans Tower, sulking as usual while looking a picture of his “hero” who never really paid attention to Eddie. I sat down next to him, the urge to hug him and never let go threatening to overcome me. I had just found out when his birthday was and that gave me a reality check. There was no more time to play cat and mouse. I had played it far too long as it was. We had mere weeks to get everything out in the open and I was regretting every moment that I didn’t say something. As I sat down I put my hand on his and rested my head on his shoulder, a single tear escaping the corner of my eye even though I tried to hold them all back. I felt him take his hand from mine and wrap his arm around my shoulders.

“You’re going to be leaving us soon,” I said, my voice betraying none of my discontent at the entire situation.

“Yes,” was all he could say. So we sat for a little while in silence, neither of us willing to say what we both knew. Finally I was able to choke out my frustrations.

“Eddie, you can’t-I….don’t want you to leave. You can’t leave.”

“I don’t want to leave either, Rose. Believe me, I don’t, but I don’t have any choice. I made a deal with Neron and those kinds of deals you can’t go back on. There is nothing I can do, there’s nothing anybody can do.”

“I can do this,” I said as I leaned in for a kiss. His lips were warm and soft, just like they ought to be. He hesitated at first, not sure if I was toying with him again or not, but when I didn’t pull away, he reciprocated the kiss. The kisses turned passionate and heated, neither of us willing to stop for fear that this might all be a dream. Right there, on the roof, in the open, we joined. It was a bittersweet union because we both knew that it would not last forever. We enjoyed what time we had that night, and I found myself waking up in his room the next morning. He had clothed and carried me back down sometime in the night, taking great care not to wake me. He was so gentle with me, I though he imagined me a porcelain doll. The peaceful look on his face as he slept was serene, I was sad to wake him. That wasn’t the only night we would be together, but that was the one that counted. That was when a small life bloomed within me and I knew I had to find a way to keep Eddie, if not for me, then for the life we created together.

I was afraid to tell him that I was pregnant, afraid that he might try something drastic. But as the weeks passed by and the time for him to go drew near, I had to think of something. We had some unspoken agreement not to say our true feelings, thinking that it might be easier when he had to go with Neron. It was a burden on me however. I wanted to tell him so bad that I loved him, but for some reason I held back. It was that night, a week before his birthday, when I finally set my resolve to not only tell him how I felt, but that he had to stay, not for me, but for his child.

“Eddie?”

“Hm?” he mumbled, half asleep, his arms wrapped around me and his head nestled in my hair.

“Eddie, I’m…..I have to tell you something.” I turned in his arms to face him.

“Yeah?” his eyes were half open, looking slightly groggy as he stifled a yawn.

“I’m….pregnant.” There. I had said it. The rest was damage control. And it could go one of a million ways. To his credit, Eddie was quite calm about the whole thing, though it probably had to do with the fact that his sleep addled brain wasn’t fully registering what I had just said. He just blinked a few times, looking slightly confused at me until it hit him. I could almost see a small gerbil running around in his brain trying to find the light switch until DING! It went on. His eyes grew wide and his head pulled back a little as if trying to gauge my facial expression.

“You’re serious?” he asked me. I only nodded, looking away and biting my lip. “Aw geeze. How far along are you?” his expression changed to worry as he ran his hand through his hair.

“Well, umm, almost two months. I think, our first time, since we didn’t really think about what we were doing. I wanted to tell you but, you, you know, I didn’t want you to go knowing that you’d leave behind a child.” His face softened and he kissed my forehead before hugging me to him.

“Rose. I understand that you were trying to protect me. Honestly though, I’m kind of glad. You can have a little part of me to keep. As odd as that sounds, I at least feel a bit better about all this. Though I don’t like the idea of him or her growing up without knowing me, the fact that I don’t leave you completely alone is a small comfort. I’m sure everyone here will help, so you won’t have to raise the little bugger all on your own. I just wish there was something more I could do.”

I held onto Eddie and tried not to cry as he said all this. I didn’t want to raise a child without a father, especially one like him. Eddie would make a great father; that much I knew. So as he drifted off back to sleep, a small smile on his face, I wracked my brain for any solution and I kept coming back to the one thing I knew Neron would accept. A soul for a soul. I knew Eddie would refuse outright if I told him my idea, so I kept quiet. For the remainder of the week I hammered out the details of what I could offer to Neron. The week went by so fast, and by the end, everyone knew the “happy” news. On the day of Eddie’s twenty-first birthday, we sat and waited for Neron to come, each with dread in our hearts, though for drastically different reasons. He came, finally, at nine o’clock while we were sitting on top of the tower.

“EDWARD BLOOMBERG! I AM HERE FOR YOU. PRAY YOUR SOUL IS PREPARED FOR HELL.” A thick misty green smoke arose and Neron appeared, looking triumphant. He had finally corrupted a good soul, and he looked like he had just won the lottery. As Eddie stood up, so did I, waiting for my chance to strike the deal.

“Good, good. You know when to submit. I think you’ll make a fine servant for me.” Neron smiled cockily, his hands on his hips. Now was the time, before it went any further.

“STOP!” I shouted as I jumped in front of Eddie. “You can’t have him, I won’t let you!”

“It doesn’t work that way, he made a deal and now he has to pay for it. There is no backing out. Unless….” I could see the cogs turning in Neron’s head, thinking he could possibly get two souls for the price of one. I wouldn’t make it so easy.

“Rose, you can’t just stop him from taking me. It’s a binding contract, no wiggle room. I’m screwed.”

“I won’t accept that. I can’t. That’s why I have to do what I have to do.” I walked forward, feeling Eddie’s gaze on my back. He knew what I was thinking, and I knew he was going to try and stop me, but I couldn’t, no I wouldn’t let him.

“ROSE! No! Don’t make the same mistake! I won’t let you throw your life away, the baby’s life away!”

Neron smiled at this. The stakes were higher now, there was an unborn child he could possibly get to as well, maybe, if he played his cards right, even corrupt from the beginning. But I knew what I was doing; I knew how to do it. I was going all in and I had a royal flush in my hand.

“My soul for his. That’s my offer.”

“Just as simple as that? My my that is an interesting offer. So shall I take it now or-”

“No, not so simple. I have conditions. There are rules to this deal. The stakes are high, as you can see, just like you like them. You can have my soul,if and only if I ever fall out of love with Eddie. If my heart ever strays, my soul is yours. You can test me all you want, as many times as you want, but you will fail.”

“Rose.” I could hear Eddie call, his voice full of emotions. I had never said I loved him, but if this went like I hoped it would, he would be hearing it for a very long time.

“Oh really now? This should be interesting. But you can’t expect to get away so easily. I need some compensation for the deal Edward struck with me.” I had thought about that too. I had a week to get all the kinks out of the deal after all, and these stakes were very high.

“You can strip him of his demonic powers you originally gave him. That should be fair enough.” Neron tapped his chin and paced, thinking about my offer. I was getting very impatient. I needed to know if my baby would have a father or not.

“Okay, Rose Wilson Worth, you have yourself a deal. However, if your heart should falter, I not only get your soul, but the original one I had intended for. Your child, because it will be gifted with demonic powers of its own, will be under contract as well. Call it, creative licensing. Remember this; you will be tested, Miss Worth, I assure you. And I will not fail. I will have your soul, and Edward’s too. As for your child, he or she will make a fine minion for me.” He magicked a contract out of thin air and it floated toward me pen and all. As I grabbed the pen, Eddie’s hand wrapped around mine and he whispered in my ear.

“You sure you want to do this?” I nodded firmly and put the pen onto the paper, signing my soul away. As I finished signing, Eddie began to glow and float in the air, the green mist surrounding him as he became human again with his red hair and cute freckles. He dropped to the ground with a muffled thud and I ran to him, cradling him in my arms. I could finally say what I wanted to say and not worry so much.

“Eddie?” he looked up at me, his head lolling to one side. “I love you.”

Neron disappeared back into the green mist as the door to the tower stairs slammed open and everyone filed out. They had all been Peeping Toms. Eddie didn’t seem to care about them though; he just put his shaky hand on my cheek and caressed it with his thumb.[

“I love you too.”

Shinobi - August 27, 2007 07:58 PM (GMT)
Well, I liked the story, and really if it's told from perspective, one only really needs to know how much the character would notice. So having Rose focus on interaction or conversation rather than surroundings makes sense to me.

I enjoy the story quite a bit. Actually I usually like stories like that, and was going to use a similer plot for TL elsewhere....GAH! I gotta stop bringing up other RPs where I use the same character heheh...but I can't help it...I really like how he developed there...

But, back on topic, I like the story.

Although: They didn't really determine what counted as her heart 'faltering'. Nor how strictly they would interpret this, and in the end, THAT could be used to screw them all out of this life they bargained for.

And suppose for a moment that Eddie died and Rose remarried, would that count as her falling out of love?

Buuuuuuut, in any case...enjoyable read.




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