This part 1 of my version on BN7 hope ya like it. (Note: This is a bit darker then the other BN stories...may use naughty words liek hell or darm.)
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:: It’s the year 20XX. Net crime has dropped down drastically since the battle against WWW. Peace has been with the world for some time now. Lan and Mayl have married and have 2 children. Ratio (Age 12), and Newo (Age 11). Ratio was give his fathers Navi MegaMan.EXE. and Newo was given her mothers Navi Roll.EXE. In then deep reaches of the Undernet a mysterious force is building. The time of peace is over. The end of the Net is upon us...


1: The Rebirth.

-Undernet-

ShadeMan: What? I’m alive again. How did this happen? I wonder how long I have been gone for.
Gunslinger: You must be ShadeMan, You’re just what they said you would be.
ShadeMan: Who are you?
Gunslinger: My name is of no importance but what is…is your help.
ShadeMan: Help, for what?
Gunslinger: To infect the net with a single virus that could wipe out the strongest of Navis. Me and my others have learned of you powers ShadeMan and we would like you to leade an army of Darkloids to delete every Navi.
ShadeMan: What will I get in return for helping you?
Gunslinger: What you will get from me is something that you could never have…something that you’ve chased so long and never got, Immortality.
ShadeMan: Ha ha ha, like you could give me something like that. Every Navi & Darkloid can be deleted. There’s no such thing as immortality. Believe me I would know.
Gunslinger: Your mind is not clutching what is going though your ears. I can give it to you. I brought you back from the darkness didn’t I?
ShadeMan: So didnt Nebula...Prove to me you can give me immortality! Prove it to me and I’ll give you my services.
Gunslinger: Fine… HTAED SI RUO REWSNA! I’ve made you immortal. I will now try to delete you with my strongest attack. GRAVEMAKER!

:: Graves pop out of the ground and ghost form and attack ShadeMan. ShadeMan feels tremendous pain but isn’t deleted buy the attack.::

Gunslinger: See, your still here. That attack would have deleted any other Navi. With my spell you can never be deleted.

ShadeMan: I’ve never felt that much power. What the hell are you?

Gunslinger: He he he, I am neither Navi, Darkloid, nor virus. I am something so evil that human hands had no part in my creation. But that’s enough about me. ShadeMan I need you to make an army of Darkloids for me. Meet me here again in 2 days. I’ll have more info for you.

-At The Hikari House-

Lan: …
Mayl: …
Raito: …I give up what did I do wrong?
MegaMan: Well first off you lied to Mrs. Mari about why you skipped class today.
Mayl: I very disappointed in you. Why would you lie and why would you cut class?
Lan: Son, I did stupid stuff when I was your age but I never skipped school, right MegaMan?
MegaMan: Yeah. Raito come one you got to be more mature. Would your sister have one this?
Lan: I don’t think she would. Neither should you. No go to your room. Your grounded from the net!
Raito: What ever.

:: Raito runs to his room and slams the door.::

Raito: God, if only they knew.
MegaMan: Knew what.
Ratio: Shut up I don’t want to talk to you. You ratted me out.
MegaMan: I had to…skipping school is bad, as much as you hate it you have to go.
Raito: What ever, I hate you MegaMan I wish you weren’t my Navi!!
:: Raito throws his P.E.T. on his bed and runs and climbs out the window.::

MegaMan: Raito come back!

After almost a month of not reviewing, I'm back. Might as well start here. I'm going to start doing everything in note format, so if it's in General Notes, I won't go into detail.

General Notes:
The Length
Grammar and Spelling
Additional Details(mainly on the new characters)

Detailed Notes:

Formatting: Please oh please, NEVER do something in PlayWrite Format. It's ugly to look at and pushes people away from reading your fic. Playwrite is generally a nooby mark and is something you should stay away from. If it takes you longer than you want to get a correctly formatting chapter out, then so be it. Additional time is worth it if the story is interesting and holds the readers' attention.

It's hard to review playwrite formats with the same amount of detail I can give to story formats, but I'm also going to take into account it's just started.

OMG! Its Chibi!!! @.@
YAY CHIBI! *Chibi glomps*

thanks for the tips Ill be rewriting this any way, I'll repost the better version later!

Hey can I make a chapter for your fan-fic? Its awesome,really and I want to add to it for you! (H)