O.K, so I need to write an essay for my teacher. Can you guys tell me if this idea is any good?

The year is 2343. Humans have long ago left Earth to find new planets to escape their troubles. On one planet, called New Terra, a city called Nightfall exists. In Nightfall there are three groups of organized crime. The Illuminati, the Emrada, and the Polajix. They hate each other because of one persons stupid decision. A war is about to break out between them. The Neutrals, the people not aligned with any of the groups, can tell. As much as the government of Nightfall tries to stop the oncoming gang war, they know they can't stop it. Now, the only question is, when?

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Is this a story or an essay?

Is this like just a free writing assignment or something?

May call it New Terra. Terra is Earth.

Karn: Essay
Dur: Free-Writing
ZKX: New Terra does sound better.

I think it's a pretty good idea. Still, I think it's more the writing than the idea that counts.

Are the Illuminati in the story the same Illuminati we have today?

Story. Hey, it sounds like the mysterious group, so I used it. It's not like the real Illuminati will come t my house and shoot me.

Advice:

Cut the Illumnati out and replace it with something else.

I'm serious, it'll make you sound more creative for what sounds like a creative writing assignment.

Well, the illuminati has been formed and reformed plenty of times. Perhaps you could somehow have it so that the illminati you have are an organization that claims to be the same group of old, but are merely posers. Then maybe some kind of sub plot occurs between the original group and the imitators.

Personally I'd keep the plot relitively clean and simple, if its just a couple pages long then don't bog down the story with sub-plots and too many twists, it'll just ruin the story you're trying to tell.

I don't do sub-plots. Well, there is the one where Calvin Polajix falls in love with Amanda Illuminati, but hey. I'll try to think of a different name for the Illuminati.

Oh, and the essay has to be 50 pages long, typed in size 12 Times New Roman. And I have until March 1st to do it. Any hints, tips, etc before I get started?

Isn't there a game called Nightfall?

When writing a scene, imagine EVERYTHING in your mind and describe it in the writing. If the room has peeling green paint and smells of fish, write it out. Instead of saying "He walked into the room and sat down," say "As he walked into the room, his senses were immediately bombarded in every foul way imaginable. The walls were dank, and the places that weren't covered in mold and rotting wood held a thick, peeling coat of vomit green paint, hastily applied many times over. The air reaked of the smell of fish heads, nearly making him want to close every orifice for fear of contamination by some unknown airborne pathogen. As he pulled the chair out, a loud scapping sound was made as the rear legs dragged their metal ends on the bare cement floor. Wobbling from it's own weight as he set it back down on all fours, he eyed the seat of the chair, filled with some type of paste, most likely some remnant of a deceased sea-creature." etc etc.

Metaphors and similies work really well too, and I think I might use them too often I love em so much.

Of course, you probably already knew this, being in a writing class n' all. Just tryin' tae help.

Trace: It is. But it's also a Greek metal band, a short story, and a bunch of characters name.

ZKX: Thanks, I'll try to do it.

If this isn't of necessity necessarily a "short story" and you're allowed to have chapters and stuff...

If you're pressed to add a few pages on, keep in mind that you can always write a prologue from some character who dies at the end of the scene to set the stage, and possibly provide your character with a motive for a given change in personality or act of vengeance or whatever.

You should name all your insignificant enemy characters who die (if you have any) after your best friends. Usually a desire to appear in a story/song etc trumps the nature of that appearance, I've found.

Bucket, just wondering, why the enemy though?